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Inspired by a song by Finneas called Break my heart again

 

Once when my soul spoke, you betrayed every word. Then your tongue promised to only sing with sincerity. I danced for a brief while, lost in your angelic orchestra. Until I stumbled and you fell, crushing our garden of roses. Then keys fused only sad sounds. Maybe it was me, but i'm sure it was you, who left me alone on that boulevard of broken promises. Vivid violins cried, until you snapped their sorrowful strings. And I was right there, but your eyes deceived you. You thought it was rain drops, not the tone of my tears, electrocuting the heart of my weeping guitar. Chills from your silence froze suppressed emotions. Creating ribs of steel, which shield flesh that is now stone. Now your love belongs to another innocent man. Who doesn't know your song, nor how your garden blooms.
Simple Musings Silent One 28 February 2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 3/28/2018 8:40:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful :)
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Date: 3/22/2018 9:25:00 PM
Beautifully written a sad lovers’ lament. So.
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Date: 3/6/2018 4:50:00 PM
Wow! Absolutely fabulous;a sophisticated write yet easy to comprehend. I love the beautiful flow each stanza has,the flow in itself acts like an imagery for me. Like the described tears that roll swiftly down one's cheeks where one tear drop joins the other preceding one and forms this cohesion/flow,thus is each line and stanza in the poem-smoothly joined and flows freely. Love the lines, 'You thought it was rain drops, not the tone of my tears, electrocuting the heart of my weeping guitar.'
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Date: 3/6/2018 7:58:00 AM
Fantastic SO, absolutely love the verse 'You thought it was rain drops, not the tone of my tears, electrocuting the heart of my weeping guitar.' You really have a way of connecting words with intense emotion. Another on my favs! Warm regards, Laura.
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:39:00 PM
Thank you Laura it seems a lot of people like that line, it is funny as it came to me while I was writing the poem..
Date: 3/5/2018 8:30:00 PM
A fine write, and a great last Stanza, nicely writ, Silent
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:39:00 PM
Thank you Viv..
Date: 3/5/2018 11:57:00 AM
Whew! This is some potent painkiller mojo elixir poetry, SO! Oh, the lines thrown our way for poetic rescue salvage ...You thought it was rain drops, not the tone of my tears, electrocuting the heart of my weeping guitar. You know the grail way of words, my talented brother poet. Spooky good poetry. Scaring me straight to the top, where true lovers of futuristic art be. Love and more love always.
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:16:00 PM
That is a great compliment and great feedback Freddie, thank you...
Date: 3/5/2018 8:12:00 AM
So good that I read it three times to better absorb beauty, depth and flow in lamenting the epic pains and massive sorrows of lost love.. A gem and a fav my friend..
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:17:00 PM
Thank you my friend..
Date: 3/4/2018 7:05:00 PM
Another amazing write Silent One; a very emotive sentimental write which pulled at my heart strings!~Che :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:29:00 PM
Thank you Che..
Date: 3/4/2018 6:32:00 PM
Lost in the song of a broken heart...Very nicely penned Silent
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:32:00 PM
Thank you Joseph..
Date: 3/3/2018 11:01:00 PM
A heartrending deep frozen tragedy brushed with serious ink done wonderfully my dear friend. Loved always, bl
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:35:00 PM
Thank you BL..
Date: 3/3/2018 6:09:00 PM
Well done SO, a long and twisted road, Life
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:36:00 PM
Thank you Jerry, nice to see you..
Date: 3/3/2018 8:50:00 AM
"Electricuting the heart of my weeping guitar" that is such an incredibly vivid masculine expression of agony... So painful but so...... beautiful.
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:36:00 PM
Thank you Ingrid, seems like a few people liked that line..
Date: 3/3/2018 6:23:00 AM
Beautifully expressed sentiments at the rather messy end of a relationship. I love the sting in the tail - the last verse. Perfect !
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:44:00 PM
Thank you Peter..
Date: 3/3/2018 3:14:00 AM
loved it
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:44:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 3/3/2018 2:16:00 AM
Brilliant like always, rather sad...
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:44:00 PM
Thank you Pashang..
Date: 3/2/2018 6:29:00 PM
Silent One, beautiful phrases and your use of creative and beautiful metaphors elevates your deep emotional poem of betrayal and sadness to new poetic heights..
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:44:00 PM
Thank you Susan..
Date: 3/2/2018 5:37:00 PM
Music and women. A flammable combination and add your poetic touch this poem is on fire! Great write on tragic feelings of betrayal and remorse.
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:45:00 PM
So true, thank you James..
Date: 3/2/2018 2:11:00 PM
Beautifully done! -love the metaphors which describe broken romance so well.
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Silent One
Date: 3/2/2018 2:49:00 PM
Thank you Sheryl..
Date: 3/2/2018 6:26:00 AM
Maybe it was me, but I’m sure it was you, crushing our garden of roses, snapped their sorrowful strings...just a few fave phrases in this heartfelt verse! <3 Kim
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Silent One
Date: 3/2/2018 2:49:00 PM
Thank you Kim..
Date: 3/1/2018 10:28:00 PM
Brilliant work... Great imagery and I loved the ending...
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Silent One
Date: 3/2/2018 2:50:00 PM
Thank you Supraja..
Date: 3/1/2018 8:02:00 PM
YES! This is really great, Silent One. And the ending is superb!
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Silent One
Date: 3/2/2018 2:50:00 PM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 3/1/2018 4:17:00 PM
Beautiful and stunning Silent... too nice a tribute to such a vixen! haha :0 Love the visual crafting as well, funny I should read this post of yours...
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Silent One
Date: 3/2/2018 2:51:00 PM
Haha... great way to put it, guess you are right though.. Thanks..
Date: 3/1/2018 3:59:00 PM
Your original, striking metaphors catch the imagination like an unexpected chord in a sophisticated piece of music. Impressive.
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Silent One
Date: 3/1/2018 4:00:00 PM
Thank you Geoffrey..
Date: 3/1/2018 3:05:00 PM
Outstanding as always.
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Silent One
Date: 3/1/2018 3:09:00 PM
Thank you Jean..
Date: 3/1/2018 1:53:00 PM
S1 I don't even know where to start. This is tragic and amazing. Bravo S1!
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Silent One
Date: 3/1/2018 3:11:00 PM
Thank you Shadow..
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