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Prince Sun summons lovingly his beautiful wife, The princess who’s always shining at night in full, quarter or half; Oh, my darling where have you been? I’ve been to the park to watch the lovers’ kissing scene. Where is Jupiter our beloved eldest son? I’ve been busy shining all day long, I hope he’s around; My love, he has just arrived and he’s big enough, He can take care of himself especially at times get rough. Here’s our daughter Saturn coming in, She has grown into a pretty lady wearing her elegant ring; Please remind her sometimes to focus on her dreams, She might have fallen in love with an alien’s son that beams. The Prince Sun makes a lovely role-call to everyone, While his Solar Princess sits beside him wearing her luminous crown; Uranus, Neptune, Mars and Earth saunter to their father While youngest Venus and Mercury run quickly to their mother. The Solar Family has finally reunited as one, Children hold hand- in-hand… going round and round; They merrily sing with joyful spirit of unity, To exhibit a magnificent view in their residential galaxy.
Jan. 17, 2014 10.15 am ( I composed this poem a month ago for my kids’ fun club) Second Place Contest: Any Poem Goes #13 Judged: 3/16/14 Sponsor: Poet PD (my greatest & most fave)

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Date: 3/18/2014 9:39:00 AM
Way to go...Sara
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Date: 3/17/2014 2:29:00 PM
Nicely written. I can see why this one was chosen to rank among the winners. Congratulations.
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Date: 3/16/2014 4:52:00 AM
Wonderful poem penned well and congrats on the win, leo
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Len Gasun
Date: 3/16/2014 12:07:00 PM
Thank you so much again my dear friend Dr. Ram.
Date: 3/16/2014 4:14:00 AM
Leonora:) Awesome win.... Take care Love *Skat
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Len Gasun
Date: 3/16/2014 12:08:00 PM
Thank you so much my dearest sis Skat! Take care as well! biggest hugs! lovem4ever, Leo
Date: 3/16/2014 3:52:00 AM
Good morning my sweet sis.. Leo.. Congratulations! Thank you for the support. :) I miss you .. Where are you? Hope to hear from you soon... xox.. Always & forever.. Your BFF ~Linda
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Len Gasun
Date: 3/16/2014 12:06:00 PM
THANKS A LOT for appreciating my poem & the win my ever dearest sis. I'm so glad you like my entry. Many lovely hugs! I miss you a lot as well.Have a nice day to you and your loved ones! lovem4ever sis & BFF forever,Leo
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Len Gasun
Date: 3/16/2014 12:03:00 PM
Hi, dearest sis of mine! Good morning there! You're very much welcome. Biggest hugs! Sorry for coming late this wkend. After my late morning rise this Sunday, I went to church, then to a family friend’s b-day party. When I came back @ condo, I went swimming downstairs then slept ‘cuz I got leg cramp while swimmin. Now, I just woke up & I’ll be taking my late dinner soon. Sending you hugs, smiles & kisses!
Date: 2/28/2014 4:34:00 PM
what a wonderful description of the solar system Leonora you make the solar family come to life amazingly good pen hugs
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Len Gasun
Date: 3/16/2014 12:09:00 PM
Thank you so much my dear friend Shadow.
Date: 2/15/2014 8:57:00 PM
what a cute galactic family this is!! Sure enjoyed this one, Leonora and to know you are such a busy beaver and enjoying your life!! a belated Valentines Day message to you: love, Andrea
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much my very dear friend Andrea.
Date: 2/15/2014 8:40:00 AM
This is a very inventive piece, I so enjoyed your creativity.
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 10:01:00 AM
Thank u so much my very dear friend Richard.
Date: 2/14/2014 9:54:00 PM
Hello SIS.. Happy Valentine's again Leo..., your very special, only you would make a family from the Solar System. I love it, I'm sending you smiles. Thank you for taking your lovely time for making me a part of your day. Another happy Valentine greeting... Hugs to you my BFF.... xox~ LINDA
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 10:00:00 AM
Thank u so much as well my dearest sis and BFF! biggest hugs! lovem4everLeonora
Date: 2/14/2014 9:43:00 PM
Leonora, a lovely picture you paint. Happy Valentine. Nice, round and round imagery. SKAT
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 9:59:00 AM
A happy Hearts Day greetings again my dearest sis and friend Skat. Thanks for your lovely comments, your constant support and everything! Thanks to YOU BOTH my loving poet sisters! ;))))
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Date: 2/14/2014 9:55:00 PM
haha my 2 favorite poets:) sis 1 and sis 2
Date: 2/14/2014 2:30:00 PM
Leonora..this is a very original fun entertaining poem...I enjoyed it a lot...happy Valentine's to you as well....:-) :-)
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 9:56:00 AM
Thank u so much my dear friend, Donna.
Date: 2/14/2014 6:36:00 AM
This is a glorious and mighty write my friend! I just love this solar family, and my favorite of them all is the princess, the moon, my muse! I like how you made Jupiter the eldest son, that was quite clever, and Ms Saturn with her rings, ha ha, a great and beautiful girl! I am quite impressed with your illustrious poem here this morning! What a harmonious piece my friend, Great Work!!
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Len Gasun
Date: 2/19/2014 9:55:00 AM
Thank u so much my dear friend, Russell.

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