Sojourn

Stow away the congeries of aches overtly attenuating the life-force Joints grinding bones as growing muscles waked Oft, stomping like an apoplectic horse... Under strained newness, a glum disposition reeked nervousness, clamping a chest distraught No diversity, glared their position Such eyes that stabbed, could snap a breath taut... Of schooling, what silent complacency! Jailers with fingertip-busting dusters or canes that cracked and smacked decency Umber-burned bruises on smartened clusters... Raking nails scratch to assuage a mind New migraines need compulsory unwinds… (4/23/21 For 'Aches Prompt' contest hosted by Constance La France)

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Michael Kalavik

Date: 8/22/2021 5:58:00 PM

I can feel the pain, but in a way that makes me benefit from having done so.

Susan Woodrow
Date: 8/22/2021 9:02:00 PM

glad you see it that way :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/5/2021 5:38:00 AM

Congrats :) God bless you. .. Love, Gina

Susan Woodrow
Date: 5/6/2021 6:18:00 PM

thank you :)

Constance La France

Date: 4/28/2021 8:48:00 AM

Susan, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt -Ache- Challenge with your wonderful Sonnet poem, I admire your use of words, well done, love _Constance

Susan Woodrow
Date: 4/28/2021 7:30:00 PM

thank you for the inspiration Constance :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/28/2021 12:02:00 AM

Oh, i could feel the pain Susan, This poem reads like a classic of old from the masters,, truly is a breath taking poem.

Susan Woodrow
Date: 4/28/2021 7:48:00 AM

thank you Harry...yes, I have experienced the mean teachers Dickens wrote about and don't get me started on boarding school days lol thank goodness for great friends :)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/25/2021 1:40:00 PM

Lovely sonnet Susan, great imagery too. Take care, Gordon

Susan Woodrow
Date: 4/26/2021 11:09:00 AM

Thank you, Gordon :)

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 4/24/2021 9:00:00 AM

Beautiful sonnet! you have adapted an old english style that goes well with the theme!

Susan Woodrow
Date: 4/24/2021 10:35:00 AM

thank you :)