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So In Love

The lights fade but my love stays Waves flow as your beauty glows When I stare into your eyes time slows So I can enjoy the show Reassuring the love will never go Your smile must have been made by Vincent van Gogh Cause it will never outgrow It makes me warm inside from head to toe You mean the world to me if you didn't already know And I will never stop fighting for the gifts that you bestow 3/13/2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/24/2018 5:19:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jeremy. Well done.
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Date: 2/24/2018 1:51:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jeremy, and welcome to the soup! Regards, Viv
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Date: 2/23/2018 10:21:00 AM
beautiful monorhyme, loved it from beginning to end, thank you and congrats :) -luloo
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Date: 7/3/2017 3:35:00 AM
A great first entry, mate!
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 7/3/2017 3:38:00 AM
Thank you :)
Date: 6/4/2017 8:41:00 PM
I hope the whoever she is, she will cherish this lovely poem!! Well said, Jeremy!!
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Date: 3/16/2017 9:33:00 PM
Beautiful...
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Date: 3/16/2017 2:22:00 PM
A headlong rush into the other person. : )
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Date: 3/16/2017 1:33:00 PM
Nice Rhyme Jeremy wish u well with being bestowed
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Date: 3/15/2017 11:45:00 AM
Very nice monorhyme Jeremy, only one suggestion, ok? Try to separate your lines so the rhyme is more easily read. The way it's written in paragraph form looks like prose, so rhyme appears unexpectedly. Just a suggestion as you requested critique. Well done overall and welcome to the soup
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Date: 3/13/2017 7:01:00 AM
How beautiful these words are...Welcome to this lovely site of poetrysoup :) Charma.
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Date: 3/13/2017 3:16:00 AM
Wonderful monorhyme in your poem, it's lovely! Welcome to PoetrySoup :)
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