Sloth

sin so seemingly harmless offending no one sloth hides behind selfish smiles feigning pain or pitiful preening and purring inside it acquiesces accepting of assistance sighing it lays back secure in the knowledge others will carry its load it is the knowing which renders it so deadly 10/31/2018 Written for Choka poetry contest “One of the Seven Deadly Sins” Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

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Line Gauthier

Date: 11/11/2018 1:44:00 PM

Great poem, Deb. Congrats on your top win.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/8/2018 4:45:00 PM

a well deserved win, deb... sweet congrats!...huggs

Susan Palli

Date: 11/7/2018 12:25:00 PM

Excellent, Deb. Never thought about the “knowing” part of being a sloth! Congrats!

Deb Radke
Date: 11/7/2018 4:09:00 PM

Thanks, Susan. Yes, it seems to me sloth has that reputation of doing no harm, yet in its worse, it knows what it is doing. I appreciate your kind words.

Winged Warrior

Date: 11/6/2018 11:33:00 PM

A great rendition of the Sloth meaning my friend...should be used for the modern day poetic dictionary...and congrats! on your win, Deb...love & light...^WW^

Deb Radke
Date: 11/7/2018 4:06:00 PM

Thank you so much, WW. I loved yours as well. I appreciate your words of support.

Jt Nyx

Date: 11/6/2018 9:30:00 PM

Wonderful write Debs, congrats on you win! Hope you have a wonderful day. Best Wishes, Jess

Deb Radke
Date: 11/7/2018 4:04:00 PM

Thanks, Jess. I appreciate your reading and commenting on my poem. Your words of support mean a lot. Wishing you a great day as well.

Laura Leiser

Date: 11/6/2018 9:16:00 PM

Your well penned poem shows great insight into the psyche of the sloth, Deb. Congrats on your win! :)

Deb Radke
Date: 11/7/2018 4:04:00 PM

Thanks, Laura. I do think sloth is underrated as a sin. I appreciate your comments.

Wendy Watson

Date: 11/6/2018 4:17:00 PM

Congratulations,Deb. I felt sure that this excellent description would be highly rated. Best wishes Wendy

Deb Radke
Date: 11/6/2018 7:42:00 PM

Thanks so much, Wendy. I appreciate your taking time to write and all your support. Deb

Edward Ibeh

Date: 11/6/2018 3:46:00 PM

Thanks for participating in my contest, Deb!:-) Wonderful write! Congratulations on your top win!

Deb Radke
Date: 11/6/2018 7:41:00 PM

I'm very grateful for placing among all the great poems submitted for your contest. Thank you so much. It was a brilliant contest. I enjoyed writing this entry. My best. Deb

Mark Elam

Date: 11/5/2018 6:24:00 PM

Such a clear yet succinct definition of a sloth. Especially like the last two lines.

Deb Radke
Date: 11/5/2018 8:15:00 PM

Thank you, Mark. Yes, it is always the knowing...

Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/3/2018 8:24:00 AM

Hi Deb, such a wonderful, creative write on the deadly sin of sloth. You have described sloth so well in this little gem. You give the feelings life, with your clever words. I wish you well in the contest. Have a wonderful Saturday. hugs....Mike. XX

Deb Radke
Date: 11/5/2018 8:14:00 PM

You’ve given me high praise in your critique. It is very much appreciated.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/1/2018 7:05:00 AM

Attributes of sloth..hidden and obvious..you captured them in your wonderful poem..Best for a win, Deb.

Deb Radke
Date: 11/5/2018 8:11:00 PM

Thank you, Vijay. As always, I welcome your warm words of support.

Wendy Watson

Date: 10/31/2018 4:42:00 PM

This is such a cleverly worded poem, Deb . An excellent description and I love the 'preening and purring' reference. Best wishes Wendy

Deb Radke
Date: 11/5/2018 8:10:00 PM

Thank you, Wendy. I’m glad you liked this poem. I did rather picture sloth as having some feline characteristics.