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Sliced Light

in my broken dream shards pierce the darkness inside letting all light in ~~ Just learning Haiku so please be gentle lol

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Date: 10/29/2010 7:10:00 AM
Really good! (";)
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Date: 10/20/2010 3:53:00 PM
you did a wonderful job, the light sounds good' nice' n.d.
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Date: 10/19/2010 3:50:00 AM
great write
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Date: 10/15/2010 8:27:00 AM
I enjoy your learning process, Jayne. I am still learning them as well. Though the modern haiku are very concrete, I love the figurative aspect of this one. It's lovely! Have a great weekend. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 10/13/2010 12:34:00 PM
Exceptional Haiku Jayne. I love when the syllable count is 5/7/5. But the new way is fine also at times. You just can't go wrong Jayne. Love,Carol
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