Sinking

Subdued sorrow seeps from swollen eyes, and severed sobs stab into the surrounding silence. I'm suffocating in a sea of separation, struggling to stay afloat but I'm sinking fast. Somebody save me before it swallows me whole.

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Ken Carroll

Date: 8/23/2013 3:32:00 PM

Hi Katie, I can feel the desolation in this one..I'm sure the darkness will disappear and the light will return..So many of us has been there before.. Regards, Ken..

Richard Palmer

Date: 12/16/2012 12:41:00 PM

wonderful write Katie,the emergency units are on there way lol

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 12/16/2012 9:11:00 AM

Poignant write Katie! I like the imagery used. The way you've used the sea to signify the depth of feeling caused by separation and the despair brought out in the sinking - brilliantly done. The angst is clearly defined. Very well done.

Timothy Jacks

Date: 12/15/2012 9:12:00 PM

I like your poem very much. It's tender, soft and sweet. Just what I needed to hear thank you.