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Singing For You My Heart Free

A bird escaped From his cage My heart free

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Roberthenry Poulin

Date: 8/18/2013 1:06:00 PM

Yes yes OH! yes, this is a super awesome haiku. The juxtaposition of the bird escaping from confinement and flying away, and the third line stating your heart is free is a wonderful leap: both bird and observer have found escape to freedom. I would make one recommendation you simplify all your haiku using little as you can in caps. Use all lowercase gives the softest sight, most haiku poets around the world disregard caps alltogether. Also, first line titles the poem: Robert Henry Poulin