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Silver Streak

All aboard the Rhode Island Line! We're guaranteed to be on time Grab your suitcase, grab your coat Let the railroad be your host Write a postcard, you will boast about what you've seen from coast to coast! We will make the traffic wait stuck behind a crossing gate Boxcars, hoppers, and sleeping cars strung together, and going far rumbling down the railroad track Don't bother looking back Up the slippery slope Engine takes the lead Picking up some speed Convoluted smoky trails Consolidated silver tails Contemplating railroad tales Whistles blast! Whizzing past! Gone! ______________________________________ 10/17/14 For Andrea's "I Don't Know" Contest

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Date: 10/30/2014 4:54:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie, the random rhyme, not required, but it adds to the flow. Enjoyable read.
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Date: 10/29/2014 6:44:00 AM
Oh this was fun to read! Grats on your win ;)
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Date: 10/25/2014 4:23:00 PM
I also love train rides, especially when you are with friends. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/25/2014 1:05:00 PM
This wonderful Carrie...I take the train everyday to work and next June I'm doing a cross country trip...congrats sweetie
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Date: 10/25/2014 11:19:00 AM
Dear Carrie, this is awesome. I've only ridden on trains a few times, but have waited at railway crossings in my car for LONG periods of time. Still, I enjoy the "rhythm" of trains as they seem to sway gently. Remember the song "City of New Orleans" about the trains disappearing from their native land? It mentions the "disappearing railroad blues." Very cool poem, Carrie! Sending a Soup Mail. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/25/2014 10:54:00 AM
Sounds like a wonderful scenic ride.....Congrats on your win
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Date: 10/25/2014 10:06:00 AM
Hi Carrie, I enjoyed your poem and could almost feel the motion of people bustling to board the train and it streaking away like lightening--like a silver streak. Congratulations on your win. Sandra
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Date: 10/25/2014 7:51:00 AM
Grest write Carrie n awesome win! Big congrats !
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Date: 10/25/2014 6:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/25/2014 4:24:00 AM
dropping back with my congratulations Carrie:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/25/2014 3:05:00 AM
Congrats Carrie,I'm not surprised.
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Date: 10/25/2014 1:42:00 AM
Nicely penned poem, carrie, congrats on the win
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Date: 10/25/2014 12:56:00 AM
CArrie, what a great way to use the speed of the train to show it GONE at the end with the one word!! GREAT way to do this type of poem, so I put you high for your inventiveness. Congrats on your silver streak winner.
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Date: 10/17/2014 11:34:00 PM
What a picturesque remembrance of traveling by train. You have made it more wonderful in this great write dear friend Carrie. Train's shape or forms may change but its sweet image in our hearts would continue to live with a sweetness to inspire us for creating such sweet Poem like yours. My good wishes for your contest entry and thank you once again for your precious comments on my Blog. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra K kapoor
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Date: 10/17/2014 6:22:00 PM
I found myself going faster and faster as I read your poem. Its terrific. ! BG
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Date: 10/17/2014 6:11:00 PM
Andrea is going to love this one. A great composition. Love it!
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Date: 10/17/2014 5:41:00 PM
brilliant descriptive write Carrie:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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