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Silent Fires

And like that, the mind flashed on The light was slowly dulling and the darkness was winning Crushed into sooty shadows Thoughts spewed from the gloom Glowing so pessimistically dry As if by Hades the darkness was fulsome The quiet rendered all but peace within Stabbing into the skin The pinprick of realization The drive for recognition But the sudden snap of sicklied inspiration Transformed the atmospheric epiphany Overwrought yet powerless Consuming like heartless acid Eating but disintegrating People crunched up the words People averted their eyes from the beginning Others stayed till the end Enduring through the rubbish Then turned their heads away for good Glad it was all over And still Thoughts reveled in and out of negative pores Glaring in silent fires Flaring with false light Unsure Understood Always burning Yearning

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/20/2013 2:26:00 PM

Some great lines in this one. I loved the last part, Always burning yearning. It really tied it up well.

David Scott

Date: 7/11/2013 11:11:00 AM

ALWAYS BURING AND YEARNING I AM TO HEAR MORE FROM YOU YOU HAVE GREAT EXPRESSION THIS REMINDS ME OF MY VISUALISATION POEM THANKYOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR COMENTS ON MINE WILL READ MORE OF YOURS XX DAVIDSCOTT YOU HAVE SOUP

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 7/10/2013 1:35:00 PM

The internal silent fires are the ones that burn more intently and due more damage. Terrific write! Hugs

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 7/7/2013 7:33:00 AM

I'm Impressed by your wonderful poem here.Good stuff from you.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 7/6/2013 7:04:00 AM

If poetry were acting, you would be an academy award winner and starlet of the carpet. If it were music, your concerts would be sell-outs. If it were food, people would be gorging at the table. But since your poetry is wisdom, I will continue to read it and savor it as long as I can see into the darkness. As Reese Witherspoon said in Legally Blonde , "This is so much better than that!" You are a gem!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 7/6/2013 3:28:00 PM

Your comments are poetry to me...thanks so much Duke for your uplifting words. You are so very kind to take a look at my work...thanks a million. ~Laura

Duke Beaufort

Date: 7/6/2013 6:58:00 AM

I had to smile over this one. I think you are describing your own creative process and your audience with a "mildly" negative but consistent view. Of course, I may be totally in outer space. The beauty of your work sometimes lies in how it affects each of us. It takes me into strange places that are far away and yet familiar at the same time. There is a definite dark side to humanity. It is strikingly captured in your work. It should be required reading. Thanks for your lovely comments.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 7/5/2013 11:59:00 AM

wow a hit you in the face poem love it Shadow x smiles

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/5/2013 7:21:00 AM

Play with fire...mmm, deep piece! I love the slightly ominous, yet powerful tone. You rock, Laura!