Get Your Premium Membership

Sibling Rivalry

Poet's Notes
(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Sara Kendrick.


Image result for pictures of a girl throwing a liquid on a boy

 

Except it was milk inside the house!!

 

The child was getting tired of being teased Words flowed from her brother's mouth unfiltered Had he more vocabulary he'd spew. She didn't care on that morning if she pleased She went to the icebox unbewildered milk threw We all stood in shock, except her brother Drenched to the degree of being drowned, whew! But equal to his cruel out of kilter words. He's thinking there's ways other to stir stew Here in the south sometimes we say of a person that they are stirrer of trouble and we used some different terminology(vocabulary) sometimes. I used icebox instead because refrigerator would not fit, so going back to my youth when some people still had an icebox. My understanding of this form is 11 lines. Ten syllables per line except for the 6th line and the 11th line which are suppose to be two one syllable words or a one two syllable word which both syllables are pronounced equally. Really don't understand stressed and unstressed. LOL Rhyme scheme is : a,b,c,a,b,c d,c,b,d,c

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 11/14/2020 7:25:00 PM
A new form of "Milk Bath", (lol) I have not written since last year. New writer and don't understand Rhyme scheme stuff. Still want to attempt something, Understand 6th-11th not 10 syllables. Thank you for challenging me.
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/15/2020 5:20:00 AM
Barbara. It is good to have you back on soup and happy writing. Thanks for stopping by ..After that milk bath, he should have great skin. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Date: 11/14/2020 2:18:00 PM
Excellent. Sara, I love the use of icebox. Have done only one; but I will try a second curtal sonnet for your contest. Thanks for the example and the leeway you offer.
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/14/2020 2:24:00 PM
Reason, Thanks for dropping by. I am looking forward to reading your work. Sara
Date: 11/11/2020 7:57:00 PM
love the verse, Sara. Oh, would we be in a lot of trouble if we got to the mild and waste it. Or hind ends would be beat read for a month. Great example. Did write the form for next time. Hugs Eve
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/12/2020 3:25:00 AM
Eve, Our parents would have reacted to the scene described in a different way. I was worried about us being late for school and work. I thought my son would have to get a bath then fresh clothes but he just washed the milk off his face and said let's go. LOL..Thanks for stopping by. Sara
Date: 11/3/2020 12:54:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... a great example of what your contest requires. God bless you.
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/3/2020 3:35:00 AM
Beata, I know I will enjoy reading your work. Thanks for stopping by and reading mine. Sara
Date: 10/28/2020 10:52:00 PM
Sibling rivalry is very common. Enjoyed. 'll try your contest. Love.
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/29/2020 4:28:00 AM
Anisha, Thanks for trying my contest. I appreciate you trying to write something new. Sara
Date: 10/22/2020 12:32:00 PM
sad but as i know from mum & her brother, this sort of thing happens. lovely write. i really enjoyed trying this form - had never heard of it before
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/29/2020 4:27:00 AM
Jack, It was probably your mom who was the stirrer, wasn't it? Thanks for dropping by. My daughter had gotten tired of her brother verbally assaulting her. I don't blame her either. No one got punished just made us all late for school and work. Sara
Date: 10/21/2020 3:24:00 PM
Hi Sara, I know a thing or two about sibling rivalry, being one of five sisters, the tales I could tell, we must have driven our poor mother mad. While the cat was away, boy would we play. Loved the story told in this Curtal Sonnet. Belle
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/22/2020 4:35:00 AM
Belle, If you feel like sharing sometimes gift us with a poem or two or more about your experiences growing up. Our son was very good at irritating his sisters especially the younger one. Sometimes as a parent it is hard to know what to do. Thanks for stopping by. Sara
Date: 10/19/2020 11:51:00 AM
what a fun story Sara:-) i have never seen this form before:-) hugs Jan xx
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/20/2020 5:55:00 AM
Jan, I hope you try one soon. I know you can do it even better than me. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
Date: 10/18/2020 6:07:00 PM
Wonderful piece Sara enjoyed reading. God bless you...
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/19/2020 3:32:00 AM
Michael, Thanks for dropping by. I am glad you enjoyed reading it. Sara
Date: 10/18/2020 1:58:00 PM
Love this :) So adorable! Good one. Love to you and prayers too. God bless you :)
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/18/2020 2:22:00 PM
Regina, Thanks for stopping by. Thanks for the blessing for I need all of those I can get. I am glad that you loved this one. Sara
Date: 10/18/2020 1:07:00 PM
that was cute, to soak him with milk. the meanie deserved it!!
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/18/2020 2:07:00 PM
Andrea, Yes, he deserved the milk bath but I was late leaving the house with all of them in tow to make it to school and work on time. He had to clean up and I had to clean the kitchen really fast. I don't know that the milk thrown helped him or not. Thanks for stopping by. Sara
Date: 10/18/2020 8:17:00 AM
I have not done one of these before, but I enjoyed your subject.. WE do some silly things sometimes..
Login to Reply
Kendrick Avatar
Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/18/2020 2:05:00 PM
S.O, Thank you for stopping by. I hope you try one of these. It was challenging for me but I am sure you can handle it with ease. Sara

Book: Shattered Sighs