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Voice: Jason Williams STARS IN THE SKY I'm standing on the shore and high above The roar of waves and rustling of the trees, A light is shining in the darkening sky, While sun is drowning in its warmest glow. I look up waiting for the one to show, Its magic glow will warm my frozen heart. That special light that sun nor moon can bring. A sparkle jumping to my inner self. I aim my wish up high and from my chest My heart pleads to my shooting star above: "Lift me up high and make me see from far How you reach out and set my being free." My white star softly strokes my hair and smiles, While from his hands the moondust spreads around. My bright star lifts the darkness from my soul, In several myriad coloured specs of light. And in his hands I beam and come alive, Accept the dark night just for what it is: A blanket, warm, to keep the light inside, Embracing starlight deep within myself. *** 8th place in contest: Shooting blank verse Sponsor: John Lawless

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Jason Williams

Date: 12/17/2016 7:30:00 PM

Oooh, this is the one you wrote for me! I'm so glad you introduced me to poetrysoup Darren. You'll probably see more of me, now that I'm finally figuring out how to navigate this confusing site. hehe. You already know I love this one. Thanks for penning this request for me boo. ;-)

Darren White
Date: 12/17/2016 11:56:00 PM

Your poem, your voice, your request. It is all for and from you <3

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/11/2016 7:49:00 PM

Beautifully written in Blank Verse form, Darren, with such excellent meter. Congratulations on your placement. Sandra

Darren White
Date: 12/11/2016 10:17:00 PM

Sandra, thank you, I love this poem myself too, very much :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/10/2016 10:43:00 PM

A 7 for this beautiful, WINNING poem, Darren! Janice

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:38:00 PM

Janice, thank you, I am honoured with a 7 :)

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 12/10/2016 10:05:00 PM

Congratulations, Darren. It deserved a bit higher placement in my estimation. But when there are many good entries of blank verse, it is hard for a host to choose. Love the rhythm of your words.

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:37:00 PM

It's quite alright, I am happy with my placement! Thank you for reading it and yes, I agree, the rhythm and cadence is very much alright, I worked hard to make it a continuous, soothing lullaby.

Deborah Burch

Date: 12/10/2016 9:40:00 PM

Congrats Darren!!!! Big Hugggs! Deb

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:36:00 PM

YAY, Thanks :) Hugs back.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/10/2016 6:10:00 PM

Beautiful, Darren. Congrats on your placement.

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 11:35:00 PM

Agnes, thank you.

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/10/2016 2:46:00 PM

I love astronomical stuff, Darren. : ) Your voice sounds like mine, especially mine when I had more your years. Lots of us rarely if ever hear our own recorded voice, and I guess those voices age with us. I usually read silently or whisper to myself, sounding out rhythm and meter, counting syllables, etc., bent forward and down over the computer. When I actually try and read aloud, sometimes I can hardly speak.

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 2:59:00 PM

Well, nice to hear your boyfriend, both your voices, in effect.

Darren White
Date: 12/10/2016 2:49:00 PM

Oops, I forgot to add that this is my boyfrien'd's voice! Will change that straight away. I myself stutter so badly that me reading my own poems would be a real joke hahahaha. I understand that reading aloud thing perfectly.

Paloma P

Date: 11/16/2016 9:17:00 AM

Lovely, I especially like the last stanza, it could stand on its own. Good luck Darren. :)

Darren White
Date: 11/16/2016 9:23:00 AM

You are right :) I have written the poem for my boyfriend. Because of that I will leave it intact. it could very well be the last stanza only indeed... And thanks.