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Think this could be rewritten as a cute song.  Would need to come up with a chorus though and even out the syllables.

She Whispered “I Love You” (MJH 20150619) She whispered “I love you” As we danced real close. She caught me by surprise, As I looked into her eyes, And time suddenly froze. I said “I love you, too.” She whispered “I love you” When I kneeled with the ring. So, while trying to be clever I said “that better be forever,” (She nodded, saying nothing) “Because I really love you, too.” The Chaplain said the words, Then we both said “I do”-- And she kissed me with a smile. Walking back down the aisle She called out “I love you” Underneath the upraised swords. A few years later, I heard the happy news. “Congratulations, Mommy. We’re now a real family.” We’d need both pinks and blues. Life just couldn’t be better. Your hair greyed, my hair thinned. Always standing side by side. Days became months became years- Most filled with joy, then later tears. One sad day, at her graveside, I heard “I love you” on the wind.

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Date: 1/6/2024 7:43:00 AM
Such a tender, loving poem. I had to leave my thoughts.
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Mark J. Halliday
Date: 1/12/2024 9:44:00 PM
Thanks for commenting; you're the first for this poem, which I wrote back in 2015. You would probably also like my sijoo Writing In Sand And Stone, and my lyric Chips And Salsa.

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