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DOWN YET NOT OUT – Candles Online

Such horrid forfeit wars yet thresh A scree of youth in blood and flesh Another bride that numbs her pain Lamenting voids that stark, remain The purple badges - medallions, gold Those vicious proxies, scant to hold Her future dreams, all prospects dim A soul conjoined to naught but him The darkness comes with frequency Thoughts push her toward mortality But left behind, their love's sweet seed Three little hearts that beat with need Their care won't leave a moment for Her tears to streak self-pity's floor His duty's done - absolved by death But hers grinds on with every breath Though, when they're safe asleep again She drinks, and thinks what might've been Her shadowed heart - a last train home She shuts the lights ... to dance alone. Written and submitted on April 27, 2020 For the "Shadows" Poetry Contest Chantelle Anne Cooke, Sponsor.

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Date: 5/24/2020 12:43:00 AM
"But hers grinds on with every breath" Gripped. my heart from start to finish. Congrats, you deserved winning.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/24/2020 4:42:00 AM
That is very kind of you to say, Barbara, and I'm so pleased you liked my poem. Blessings to you and yours, my friend! <3
Date: 5/22/2020 10:05:00 AM
wow..super imagery.."tears to streak self-pities floor" "her shadowed heart, a last train home" loved it..so beautiful..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/24/2020 4:41:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Nancy, that means a lot to me - I'm so pleased you found this one worthy of comment. May blessings to you, my friend - stay safe and sound! :o)
Date: 5/20/2020 10:27:00 AM
A most thought provoking introspective piece ! I enjoyed this immensely ! Congratulations on your win !
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/21/2020 10:38:00 AM
You are very kind, Kimberly, and your opinion is very important to me ... many thanks and blessings, Dear Poet! <3
Date: 5/16/2020 1:59:00 PM
Beautifully written Gregory. Deeply Emotional and filled with imagery.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/21/2020 10:37:00 AM
Thank you so much, James, I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem - blessings, My Friend! :o)
Date: 5/12/2020 1:30:00 PM
Hello Gregory R. Barden, Loneliness is a horrible feeling and hard to live with. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/21/2020 10:36:00 AM
Thank you so very much, that's so kind of you, Darlene - blessings! :o) <3
Date: 5/4/2020 1:47:00 PM
Another great one, congrats G on another win...this ones a fave, love this style of writing!!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/4/2020 5:16:00 PM
Thank you so much, John - this is one of my best in a while, I think, I'm really pleased you found it worthy. Blessings! :o)
Date: 5/2/2020 3:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your trophy win. A great story in your poem. Enjoy your win and day..........
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:55:00 PM
Thank you very much, Paul, that's very kind of you - I'm so pleased you found my poem worthwhile. Blessings! <3
Date: 5/2/2020 3:59:00 AM
Absolutly beautiful. Congratulations on your great win. Kind wishes, Kai
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:54:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Kai, thanks so much! I hope you are well, my friend! :o)
Date: 5/1/2020 6:54:00 PM
Beautiful, poignant, vividly descriptive, Greg--a WINNER! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:54:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Janice - so happy you liked my poem! <3
Date: 5/1/2020 4:29:00 PM
"A soul conjoined to naught but him". A heartrending reminder of the extreme costs of war and the sacrifices borne by those on the homefront bereft of their loved ones. Congrats, poet on your #1 placement. Well-earned ~ John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:53:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Dear Friend, your opinion carries much weight as you know, and I'm so pleased you liked this one. Blessings, Bro! :o)
Date: 5/1/2020 3:45:00 PM
Such a poignant piece Greg. I see why it won you a trophy! Congratulations! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:53:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Connie - blessings, Dear Poet! <3
Date: 5/1/2020 11:06:00 AM
BIG CONGRATS to win TOP.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:52:00 PM
Thank you so much, Anisha!
Date: 5/1/2020 10:25:00 AM
The forgotten casualties of war. Congrats on your win, Greg, your poetry is always so amazing. Stay safe. John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:52:00 PM
Thank you so very much, John, I greatly appreciate it, Friend! :o)
Date: 4/27/2020 11:28:00 PM
Another bride that numbs her pain..Three little hearts that beat with need..Her shadowed heart - a last train home..Those lines pierced my heart..No words to describe your poetic skill.. Great write Gregory..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/3/2020 7:51:00 PM
You are very kind, Jenish, and your opinion is very important to me ... thanks and blessings, Dear Poet! <3

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