Sentenced

They place my vowel Under barren landscape Sipping from cracked porcelain cup Of an alienated heartbeat Devilish grins Slapping Karma’s bottom, A quarterback’s misguided win Liar’s prophetic retinas glaze With metric, disciplinary ruler They place my consolidated lyric On upper hand Of cubic zirconium petulance Their torn, lanolin coated tissue Degrading polyester embedded uniform Mislead by “savior’s” belief A desolate embodiment of character They observe me With cherry coated pupils Through rusty, iron bars Its frosty echoes Portraying fickle sonatas in these stale winds Yet, My ambient tear Is simply a hoax for their recycled victory Holding wooden spoon against my waist Ready to crawl ©Drake J. Eszes

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/14/2013 9:12:00 PM

Good evening, Drake.....Big day tomorrow....My today already......Soup Mail....Promise I won't sentence you....

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/14/2013 9:17:00 PM

I didn't see a Soupmail yet. So, I'll be waiting. :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/14/2013 9:15:00 PM

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/11/2013 2:15:00 PM

EXCELLENTLY PENNED BEAUTIFUL PIECE

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/11/2013 5:13:00 PM

Hi & thank you so much, Liam!

Madelin Barton

Date: 9/11/2013 1:38:00 PM

very good write my friend gripping

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/11/2013 1:41:00 PM

Hi & thank you so much, Madelin!!! =)

Molly Montgomery

Date: 9/9/2013 11:44:00 AM

I am enjoying reading your poetry, Drake! Makes you wonder about good and bad... Molly

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/9/2013 11:45:00 AM

Indeed, it does. Very cool of you to stop by, Molly! Thanks so much! :)

John Posey

Date: 9/7/2013 7:17:00 PM

Drake, my friend, you have a really settling effect on me. When I get to feeling like I need a dose of humility, I need only read some of your fantastic work. I'll take a line from George Gobel and say that when I read your poetry I feel like a pair of brown shoes in a room full of tuxedoes..... Great writing, as usual.... Jake

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/7/2013 10:13:00 PM

Hey, John! Sir, you really lit up my evening with your comment. I cannot tell you what it did to me. Thank you so very much for taking the time to come by here.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/2/2013 4:28:00 PM

Awesome one! Powerful and unique metaphor throughout! Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/2/2013 4:33:00 PM

Thank you so much, Laura. =) I seriously appreciate it!

Bl Devnath

Date: 8/31/2013 11:02:00 AM

A powerful poem of visions. Loved always, bl

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/31/2013 2:01:00 PM

Yes, for sure. Thanks so much, BL! =)

Carol Eastman

Date: 8/30/2013 8:36:00 AM

You're an artist with imagery... The way you throw those adjectives in there ... really works... It's definately an art.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/30/2013 8:39:00 AM

Hey Carol, nice to meet you! Thank you so much for your kind words! :) I gotta put those adjectives to good use, ya know?

Courtney Courtney

Date: 8/29/2013 7:26:00 PM

Pretty good Drake I like your stanza

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/30/2013 12:48:00 AM

Hi & thank you, Ruth! =)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/29/2013 6:55:00 PM

More comments to enjoy! Thanks for the visit today Drake. I'm off to read your new poem.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/30/2013 12:48:00 AM

Indeed! :) Thanks, Richard!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/28/2013 7:46:00 AM

This is about the fourth time I have come back to read this poem. You are a master of metaphor! Every time I read this it is like a veil shifting and I glimpse another truth. Your comments on my poetry is very encouraging. Thank you.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/28/2013 8:10:00 AM

You're getting to know my style & approach quite well. That is VERY cool of you to say all of those things. And I plan to continue encouraging on your work. :) Thanks, Monterey!!!

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/27/2013 6:55:00 PM

I love poetry with metaphors, the ones that leave you pondering thoughts long after the read...well done poet you have crafted an amazing piece!

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/28/2013 8:04:00 AM

And you have just nailed down why I write to begin with. :) Make 'em think! Thank you Sandra.

Elai Cee

Date: 8/27/2013 6:51:00 PM

hi Drake, intentionally to visit u here and i need a little favor for you. im writing oration piece for the contest in our school. because i saw that ur honest commentator and i love ur write. hope u can help me to give ur advice and comments. ill give the links of my blog if this done. hope i can see ur comment there. thanks and God bless!---Elai

Elai Cee
Date: 9/1/2013 2:38:00 AM

thanks Drake

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/28/2013 7:56:00 AM

Hey, Elai!! How friggin cool! Shoot me a Soupmail with your blog and such, lets talk. :)

Cherie Thomas

Date: 8/27/2013 3:29:00 PM

Wow...truly fantastic!!! Drake you just have such a great way with words...so enjoyable to read ty4sharing:0) cherie

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/27/2013 5:23:00 PM

Hey Cherie! It's been awhile! Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate that. :)

Donna Jones

Date: 8/26/2013 8:06:00 PM

Hi Drake...all I can really do is echo below comments here...you are the guy that makes me say...I wish I was smart.....did you read encyclopedias for fun as a child? Darn good poem!

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 8:35:00 PM

You are smart, Donna!!! =D Actually, not really. I avoided them like the plague. Only if I NEEDED to. =) Thank you so much, Donna!

Jack Jordan

Date: 8/26/2013 7:05:00 PM

Fine writing here! Going to add it to my faves. I can just see you doing this at a slam, or even better in some smoky club with Ginsberg and Kerouac in attendance... Jack

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 8:02:00 PM

You are smart, Donna!!! =D Actually, not really. I avoided them like the plague. Only if I NEEDED to. =) Thank you so much, Donna!

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 7:54:00 PM

That's awesome of you, Jack. Thank you. :) Ginsberg & Kerouac...damn. That would be badass.

Sean L Sanders

Date: 8/26/2013 12:30:00 PM

Drake I've read some very powerful poetry today you my brother happened to be on the list three poets today made me say WHAT, YOUR ONE OF THE THREE. What can I say other then thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 1:54:00 PM

Thanks so much, Sean. It's great to see you back around again!!! =)

Sean L Sanders
Date: 8/26/2013 12:31:00 PM

I meant to say Drake not Drape sorry about that

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/26/2013 12:02:00 PM

soup mail!..:)

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 1:15:00 PM

M'kay!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/26/2013 9:05:00 AM

Dropped back to read the comments of those who appreciate your talented beautiful mind.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 9:22:00 AM

=D You're too kind, Richard. Thanks again, so much!

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/26/2013 6:52:00 AM

Once you taste that freedom, you will end up wondering why it took me so long to get here... In the end sometimes the journey is our main lesson.. okay I am babbling again. Just love how you ended it! Gotta love that " Is simply a hoax for their recycled victory" says so much :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/26/2013 7:44:00 AM

Indeed, it does. ;-) Thank you so very much, Wilma!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/24/2013 5:29:00 PM

searing imagery coupled by yet another cubistic feel, drake...you dovetail the dynamics of being investigated with some serious , underlying effect.... wpw, a deep write!..:) hugggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/24/2013 7:59:00 PM

=) Thank you so very much, Nette! I'm quite grateful for that!

Juli- Michelle

Date: 8/24/2013 11:02:00 AM

Very descriptive piece. Thank you for your comments on my poem. You must have a very wise Father :) Love, Juli

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/24/2013 11:53:00 AM

Yes, my Dad taught me a thing or two. ;-) Very nice of you to come by here, Juli! =D Thank you so much!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/24/2013 8:06:00 AM

Drake what can I add that has not been said? A fantastic write form a very skilled pen love it Shadow x smile

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/24/2013 11:53:00 AM

Your presence here is greatly appreciated. That alone is awesome in of itself. :) Thank you dearly, Shadow!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/24/2013 7:28:00 AM

I so look forward to reading a new poem from you and this did not dissapoint. I also love the reactions you receive. I dub thee Master of The Metaphor! well done my friend.

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/24/2013 7:40:00 AM

=D Yeah, the reactions are getting more priceless by the day. It's a beautiful thing. You're truly too kind, Richard. Thank you so much!!!

Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/23/2013 9:42:00 PM

A powerful write and very well expressed...A metaphoric masterpiece...leaving me to read and ponder several times... "Portraying fickle sonatas in these stale winds" ..

Poet Tacito
Date: 8/23/2013 10:22:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Karen! Making the reader think is my goal. =) Very happy you stopped by!!!