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Sense

"It would be so nice if something made sense for a change", Alice shouted for all to hear! She hoped her words echoed in every land crystal clear. In case she wasn't heard, she tried a second time telling all around what was in her mind...... "I wonder if I've been changed in the night? Let me think. Was I the same when I got up this morning? I almost think I can remember feeling a little different. But if I'm not the same, the next question is 'Who in the world am I?' Ah, that's the great puzzle!"i and with that said she put on her dancing shoes and searched for a partner to dance with. She needed that to happen, dancing brings her back to life. Its like needing oxygen. It not a want but a need. She was lost but used her heart as her compass. She was a bright shining light full of love and passion. She was a gypsy roaming the earth her love she gave in rations. She trusted all at first To lay down a law of respect But slowly was burned most everytime When would she Collect? What she was owed A bit of joy A taste of love without being coy. Alice is sweet and pure as air She just thinks life should be fair. Maybe she'll wardrobe one last time and go on an adventure ridding the slime. What would her fans think? I think they are owed An honest heartfelt scene Before it snows.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 6/3/2011 10:18:00 AM
Hi Kirsten polish this up dear, Make sentences start with capitals [most do but not all] take the "i" off the end of line 6. If a sentence starts with "And," that's what you do ;) Lastly don't capitalize at the beginning of a line IF it is NOT the beginning of a sentence. Your form is narrative. THANKS for the entry BIG HUGS
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Date: 6/2/2011 7:07:00 PM
This poem is just lovely, I have always wanted to do an Alice in Wonderland poem, you have inspired me, and Kristen thank you so much for selecting my poem in your One Wish contest, I am very honored and thrilled, you have no idea how much that poem means to me, it was written from the depths of my soul, thank you~~
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Date: 6/2/2011 5:40:00 PM
wow! very good. Kristen~luv*skat
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