Senryu 2

Senryu 2 broken old man pacing the back yard fence talking to himself

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 11/11/2013 8:41:00 PM

Excellent, Jack! A sad but common scene...congrats to you! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/11/2013 9:46:00 PM

Thank you for the comment. Yes, all too common... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/9/2013 10:39:00 AM

Good morning Jack, i think I know this old man.... :) congrats... , xox~ LINDA

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/9/2013 11:58:00 AM

A lot of us know him. Thanks... Jack

Sandra Adams

Date: 11/9/2013 9:02:00 AM

I could see this image unfold...good one, congrats on your win :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/9/2013 9:08:00 AM

Thank you, Sandra...

John Beharry

Date: 11/8/2013 9:55:00 PM

I think the original Japanese senryu masters would be very pleased with this piece which is in their traditional style. Congrats on a fine piece of writing and on your win!

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/8/2013 10:04:00 PM

Thank you for the wonderful compliment, John... Jack

Kim Merryman

Date: 11/8/2013 6:03:00 PM

Such a sad picture, but a great write! Congrats on your win, Jack! Love, Kim

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/8/2013 10:05:00 PM

Thank you, Kim...

Kash Poet

Date: 11/8/2013 8:36:00 AM

Very nice senryu here Jack!Congrats on the win.

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/8/2013 10:22:00 AM

Thanks. I appreciate the comment... jack

Skat A

Date: 11/7/2013 11:05:00 PM

ha I Know this old man ----Just Kidding... Jack, Congratulations, on your win........ LOVE ~SKAT~

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/7/2013 11:34:00 PM

Thanks, Skat. As I said to John, I understand him now... Jack

John Posey

Date: 11/7/2013 6:55:00 PM

That describes me in my younger days... Congratulations, my friend.... Jake

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/7/2013 11:33:00 PM

he was my grandfather. Now I can appreciate his condition... Jack

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/7/2013 6:16:00 PM

Poor man..good write and congrats. BG

Juliet Ligon

Date: 11/7/2013 4:24:00 PM

Gotta love it. Congrats, Jack!

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/7/2013 4:31:00 PM

Thanks, Juliet...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/7/2013 3:32:00 PM

Congratulations to you in Susan's contest. Good to see you on the list.

Jack Jordan
Date: 11/7/2013 4:31:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2013 3:52:00 PM

a very visual one!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 10/12/2013 4:23:00 PM

My grandfather... Jack

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/11/2013 6:16:00 PM

very well written senryu :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 10/11/2013 6:21:00 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting... Jack