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Secret of Lips-- Retourne

The moonbeam wears its glittered thread, while stars lift evening's fine sarong a trance ascends far overhead moist kisses fondling a raw song While stars lift evening's fine sarong in secrets flushed …dark turns to light when hungry lips meet to adorn a fragrant tryst of soul’s birthright A trance ascends far overhead to drape clandestine hours…winds tease, pouring a thirst on mouths that spread dusk to sun in heavenly bliss Moist kisses fondling a raw song As lovers moan in harmony To steal the gaps…now worlds belong In hush of oneness, as they flee. A Kiss is Just a Kiss Contest ~ secret love~ 7/24/2013
A retourne is a French form of poetry, similar to the kyrielle, with four (4) quatrains written in tetrameter (8 syllables/line). - Lines 2, 3, and 4 are REPEATED as the first line of verses 2, 3, and 4

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Date: 8/5/2013 10:09:00 AM
great nette.Congrats on your win. (:cJenish
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Date: 8/4/2013 1:40:00 AM
I see you made the list. Way to go, Nette, with your retourne gem.
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Date: 8/3/2013 9:30:00 PM
amazing... love ~SKAT~
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Date: 8/3/2013 9:02:00 PM
a sweet winning poem...Linda
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Date: 8/3/2013 8:17:00 PM
This is soo lovely! You did it very well! Biggest hearty congratulations on another super win my dear friend Nette! Cheers! Thank you so much for sharing! Have a blessed wkend to you and your love ones! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 8/3/2013 8:01:00 PM
Hadnt heard of this form..glad you used it.Congrats. BG
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Date: 8/3/2013 3:33:00 PM
Congrats on your great win..I knew it would be in the winners' list..Sara
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Date: 8/3/2013 3:09:00 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poems, nice to read your entry Nette. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/3/2013 2:17:00 PM
Beautiful imagery as always, stunning piece. Congrats!
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Date: 7/26/2013 8:47:00 AM
Good to know this new form.Beautiful imagery here Nette.
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Date: 7/25/2013 2:24:00 PM
I never tried this form Nette.You did a wonderful job with it.The vast vocabulary of enchantment is in your hands.I love the way you used the word sarong..original.Going tmfvs..you deserve it
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Date: 7/25/2013 9:56:00 AM
My poetess friend, I feel you have golden liquid ink hidden in you to depict beautiful images with excellent words. You have shown a fantastic magic here. Loved much. Always, bl
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Date: 7/25/2013 9:33:00 AM
You are like a walking thesaurus filled with metaphors & serenity. This piece is just another example of that...
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Date: 7/25/2013 8:30:00 AM
Very dreamy, i was left gloomed with such joy and excitement . LOVE IT!!! *smiles* Ron
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Date: 7/25/2013 8:09:00 AM
Gorgeous! You have such an elegant style, Nette.
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Date: 7/25/2013 7:24:00 AM
Those repeating lines can be fun and easy but they can be hard to work with sometimes..Great job that you did ..It has good flow..Thanks for the visit..Sara
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Date: 7/24/2013 9:27:00 PM
Wow!!!very lovely tapestry of words, amazing they fit naturally together, to make this beautiful poem. Really enjoyed reading nette, thankyou for sharing....cherie<3
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Date: 7/24/2013 9:26:00 PM
YES! A new form, and I have to admit I have already written one in that form. I have to put this within my form listing that I have created for myself. I sure would like to see more of these wonderful forms Nette, you are a master of many forms my friend! This write is truly a phenomenal write! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening nighttime poem this evening! What a powerful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 7/24/2013 9:18:00 PM
Romantic, romantic, romantic!!!! YES! Your words are a prelude to wonders to come...beautiful imagery, Nette. I don't know how you think up of these things....While starts life evening's fine sarong...and THEN...to follow rules and meter....WOW! Lovely! C'est manifique!
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Date: 7/24/2013 3:26:00 PM
thanks for showing this French form, Nette. Stunning imagery as always.
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Date: 7/24/2013 11:29:00 AM
- Another one of your beautiful poem ! - Thank you for the B-day blog yesterday Nette!! - I had a really nice day! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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