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Second Crack

Once there was a man called Frank" the Crack". He’s no eccentric crack rather good jokes he'd crack. A crack in the ship? A crack in the lips? Bloody leave the first Ooh-Ahh!...the second crack. edited after taking the suggestions from Vicki Acquah.

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Vicki Acquah

Date: 10/17/2013 2:36:00 PM

Once there was a man called Frank" the Crack". He is not an eccentric crack But good jokes he'd crack. A crack in the ship ? A crack in the lips ? Bloody leave the first Ooh-Ahh !...the second crack. I think this could be a good limerick with a pattern of rhythm in the word play.

Poet. Undertaker
Date: 10/18/2013 2:07:00 AM

Vicki you are a great friend. If you could throw suggestions as you visit i will be happy. thanks my friend. (:v Jenish.

Vicki Acquah

Date: 10/17/2013 2:22:00 PM

You Write very well -I am always inspired esp. When I realise this is your second language.If you can - try an use endings such as ( cracked ) as" he cracks" good jokes" he cracked". past tense and present tense.He always perpetually cracks good jokes..THIS IS A GOOD EXERCISE.