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Written: October 4th 2023 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ An untapped jewel in a secluded nook. A home down with treasures to brook It is a phony ossuary, hence the walls droop. Gazebo-grinning goofs giggle in a group. Once a majestic home, a sign of affluence Now a lair of stealth and an oasis of dalliance. As time passes, its splendor starts to wane. A breadline was betrayed between chains. Within the halls of this mansion, dubbed lair, A lodger once lived; his presence is debonair. A fortress of ideas, where brains languish Its oxidation sealed its own anguish. A misty garden, a sense of impending doom Where shadows lurk, in the forlorn room. A tight grip of ridicule was urged to bestow. For those who sought a haven, a place to glow, But the home has a scheme—a revamp—in mind. Rise from an inky abyss to set the past behind.  A crucible of goals, it yearned to start anew. Toss its crypt shell, and lair to tame and subdue. Without the upheaval, the center craved A beacon of light, a place of refuge, staved. It would grow from a snug mess of a cabin. With tittivated requests, it is trashing back in. With each room restored, every spot is anew. The home evolved, and its purpose grew. It is no longer a place of gloom and dread. Yet it is a blaze-filled delight, as love may spread.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 10/7/2023 7:05:00 AM
This poem speaks volumes, and conveys so many emotions in a deeply moving manner! I am left pondering and feeling the depth especially as i read the lines “ But the home has a scheme—a revamp—in mind. Rise from an inky abyss to set the past behind. “ theres so many i know that dont feel home in their home, home is a state of mind and so many are struggling to let past be past! Your words are wise and can see you have a deep understanding of life! Profound and poetic with excellent alliterations
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Date: 10/5/2023 5:51:00 AM
An untapped jewel in a secluded nook-- A home down with treasures to brook--sometimes such jewels suffer due to neglect, but a little touch of love and care can restore their beauty, as you expertly convey in the ending lines. So true to real life my friend.
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Date: 10/5/2023 4:07:00 AM
Oh my! Your poem reminded me of my 'wealthy' aunt's home that was beautiful when it was new, majestic like your poem says. After 60 years, its splendor waned...just last year she moved to a retirement village...and the home is being revamped. I drive by it once in a while and marvel at its renovation--did that just yesterday. I'd call that synchronicity! :-) Loved your poem, am faving it. Enjoy your day, Sara
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