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Seaweed Monster

In the inner most Deepest depths, you tortured me until there was no beauty left A vile monster with lying tongues In my ocean deep You became slimy You attacked me without a heart Hurting me In the depths Creeping like seaweed all around me Covering your lies Disguised as truth, leaving a horrible stench In my ocean Piece by piece In tearing through the crack Reaching for the light of truth Barely able To breathe You will not drown me With your loveless heart The tide is turning You no longer smell sweet I see a monster Buried deep You left your scar Your vile treatment In the stench of hurt Looking to the heaven's I bled for you you chose To put me in hell

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Paul Callus

Date: 10/28/2014 2:17:00 PM

(Found it straight away!) This is very powerful, Liam. This is also scary, but not in the same way that mine is...it is the human behaviour that's scary in this case. Glad you managed to move on my friend. // paul

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/28/2014 2:45:00 PM

paul this one nearly destroyed me during a cancer scare smiling but i have forgiven since each precious memory is what shines in the end life is to short i see pal reading back graphic emotions oh i have so many dark ones like this one not even posted they almost scare me i wrote a prayer of hope that time now being published on a prayer book

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 10/17/2014 9:21:00 AM

I applaud you for your great write Liam! :-)

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/17/2014 9:28:00 AM

smiling teddy you want to read the cheese monster lol wonderful comment heartfelt beautiful truly appreciated

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/14/2014 11:38:00 PM

Great touching write Liam congratulations.

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/14/2014 11:57:00 PM

thank you kindly maurice heartfelt dear friend deeply appreciated pal

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/14/2014 10:31:00 PM

It's so sad what people do to each other. Congratulations on your win Liam.

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/14/2014 10:36:00 PM

yeah brenda and they call it love looking through loves eyes one sees hate wonderful comment dear friend deeply appreciated bless you

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/14/2014 9:55:00 PM

Dark and deep expressions, liam, congrats on the win

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/14/2014 10:16:00 PM

thank you ram truly wonderful comment dear pal heartfelt appreciated

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/14/2014 8:36:00 PM

Liam, I am so sorry you experienced this kind of pain! But this excellent write was a great way to unburden yourself of the grief. Congratulations on a wonderful, well-deserved win! Pandita

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/14/2014 8:44:00 PM

pandita thank you deeply light is the only way forward dear friend smiling heartfelt beautiful comment bless you truly appreciated

Jan Allison

Date: 10/14/2014 12:20:00 PM

Very deep and dark Liam many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 10/14/2014 1:02:00 PM

this jan was wrote in great darkness enveloped in a pit of pain the lady of nine years dirty phone calls her with another man i had to get the police involved in the end she scared me thank you dear friend bless you i smiled long time since i read this one

Shane Cogan

Date: 8/25/2013 3:52:00 PM

Deep, dark and powerful words. Hope the pain has eased.

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 8/25/2013 4:53:00 PM

oh thank you in the sense of darkness yeah only now when the truth surfaced I was used in my writing you will see how thank you for the wonderful comment deeply appreciated

Shanity Rain

Date: 8/25/2013 3:43:00 PM

very deep , reminds me of that floating monster known in Ireland !

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 8/25/2013 4:55:00 PM

ha ha that's were I found it ha ha wonderful comment deeply appreciated thank you ever so much

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/24/2013 3:26:00 PM

So deep is this poem..When love turns sour..how deeply it hurts..making us utter and act ins way we nevdr believed we would..It sounds like a painful rejection..Very emotional

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 8/24/2013 3:33:00 PM

THANK YOU DEEPLY FOR THE AMAZING BEAUTIFUL COMMENT DEEPLY APPRECIATED