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Season Woven In Grief

Persuaded by time, and clothed in rust, trees reveal a changed homecoming... The illusions of my youth drift away with falling leaves My eyes search for him, although my heart knows better Old fences need paint, Scabs of white shed like feathers from the dry and weathered rails There, by the back door his old plaid jacket is hanging, waiting to be worn... It holds scent of burning leaves... A tear smolders on the sleeve ____________________________________________________ For the Grief Contest:

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 10/4/2013 9:14:00 PM
nice win Carrie, congrats......... SKAT
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Date: 10/3/2013 8:23:00 AM
congrats on your win!
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Date: 10/2/2013 4:31:00 AM
Ah the memories of time. Well done. Robert(RabCD)
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Date: 10/2/2013 4:27:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Carrie
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Date: 10/1/2013 6:25:00 PM
I loved this one the first time I read it, it's no surprise it took a win...a big congrats to you :)
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Date: 10/1/2013 10:59:00 AM
Well done carrie love xx
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Date: 9/30/2013 8:31:00 AM
Incredibly beautiful, yet poignant & sad. There was a lot of pain & reflection in this writing. Wonderful job!
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Date: 9/29/2013 8:04:00 AM
wow...one can't help but feel the emotion in this poem...you paint the scene well! great write!
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Date: 9/28/2013 10:56:00 PM
Carrie, I think Susan will really like this tanka set. I love how you SHOWED grief and did not TELL it. that makes the poem so much more interesting. Thanks for sharing your story of the drive in fog. I have been in several such situations and always it is scary!!
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Date: 9/28/2013 1:07:00 PM
Very good Tanka here Carrie.Loved how you separated the last line of your poem....
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