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School Dance

Young boys Looking in the mirror Combing hair with wet comb Practicing alluring smile Flexing developing biceps Steel yet to be hardened Dreaming with sweaty palms Hoping she says yes Inspired by Monterey's poem Hope

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Robin Davis

Date: 10/23/2013 8:57:00 AM

Richard This write is cute and creative. The descriptive words lets the reader imagine past dances and the fear of asking someone to dance. Nice job

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:24:00 AM

Thanks Robin

Richard D Seal

Date: 10/19/2013 9:02:00 PM

Ah and the memories come flooding back. Captured perfectly in this write. Rick the Watch part three is not showing in your list, I'll check you out again later. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:25:00 AM

Hi Richard, I'm glad you found the ending.

Emmie Ay

Date: 10/18/2013 12:50:00 AM

So cute! Short but sweet and with so little words you described my entire prom experience lol

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:26:00 AM

Hi Emmie, thanks!

John Posey

Date: 10/17/2013 7:07:00 PM

You have perfectly captured the situation... Girls always looked much older when you asked them to dance. After the first dance I felt much bolder.... Jake

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:26:00 AM

Thanks John.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/16/2013 3:35:00 PM

'Dreaming with sweaty palms hoping she says yes-How sweet this is.Reminds me of the exitement of my first teen dates..What a lovely feeling.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:27:00 AM

I'm pleased you like it.

Joseph Matose

Date: 10/16/2013 8:20:00 AM

Great Imagism. It's good you've thought of these boys..it reminds me of those years; shadow boxing, rehearsing a step to lure girls, fine-tuning the voice....Thanks for sharing. JM By the way, I featured you in my latest poem: POPCORN MUSIC.JM

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2013 9:12:00 AM

I will check it out Joe.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/16/2013 7:55:00 AM

Good morning, Richard...4:00 pm, my time...without fail...You're there! :) Read this one before....came back to comment....Adorable write! Have a great day!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2013 9:11:00 AM

Good morning 7:11am my time. Easing my way into the day.

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/14/2013 4:28:00 PM

this one really hit home as I just dropped some giddy girls off at the homecoming dance last night...great piece Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2013 9:10:00 AM

That is a nice image, I hope they had a fun evening.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 10/14/2013 10:58:00 AM

And now we get the guys point of view...wonderful! I enjoyed reading both you and Monterey today and thanks so much for stopping by my pages. Love and blessings, Rhonda

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/14/2013 11:25:00 AM

Blessings to you as well, thanks for commenting:

Poet Tacito

Date: 10/14/2013 10:24:00 AM

Awesome! I used to be one of those boys! Combing my curly afro hoping my nerdy smile will attract that tall, brunette girl. Ah, what wacky days...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/14/2013 11:26:00 AM

Me too, I still love to dance. Fortunate for me No more worry of being rejected. The sweaty palms have also dried.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 10/14/2013 10:03:00 AM

I absolutely love it! This is the perfect balance for my poem. The view from the other side of the dance floor.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/14/2013 11:27:00 AM

I am pleased you like it. Thanks for the inspiration.