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A humid afternoon , in the middle of August, has nothing much to commend about it. I can hear the humming of air conditioning coming from both sides of a familiar old street. It's too hot for even the ardent gardener to be out and about, and sidewalks are deserted, while children are herded into backyard wading pools. Clouds are softly framed in bands of charcoal grey. I stand on the corner, waiting for the light to change, and waiting for cars to allow me to cross the street. rush hour traffic... bees circle the elm trees with no notice of me I approach the old Victorian, and can't help but notice how painted shutters need repair, and the garden needs weeding. Wild devil-grass is taking over the wind-whipped faces of dreary, old zinnias. Seeing it so unkempt, makes me a little sad Drooping over the sidewalk, thirsty roses lean over to greet me, as I ring the bell. The old woman opens the door and suddenly her unbridled joy upon greeting me, has put sparks in eyes, and softened her face, while my worrisome mood evaporates, like a freshly-washed day. I'm quickly ushered into the talcum-scented foyer of friendship. a wilted blossom still beautiful in my palm.... new lines in her face ________________________________________________ 7/19/15 For Contest Sponsored by Scott Thirtyseven

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Date: 8/22/2015 9:25:00 AM
Congrats on your win Carrie!
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Date: 8/21/2015 9:27:00 AM
I really like the sentimentality you have captured in this write. I also enjoyed how detailed your environment is. Then you end with a wonderful haiku. Thank you for entering my contest. May you enjoy more haibun.
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Date: 8/21/2015 1:54:00 AM
Congrats on another wonderful win Carrie with this amazing haibun!
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Date: 8/20/2015 6:37:00 PM
Carrie, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:00:00 PM
lovely to read this again Carrie many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/23/2015 9:16:00 PM
What a beauty you have sketched and painted with the touching colors of imagination and the realities of life. ..."and I'm quickly ushered into the talcum-scented foyer of friendship." The form may be new to me but your expressions took my away for a moment in the fragrance of the telecom. A full 7 for such a lovely beautiful write and my good wishes for your contest entry dear friend. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra K Kapoor
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Date: 7/22/2015 5:53:00 PM
Carrie, beautiful mood and feelings in this sweet write, 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, I breathed . . .
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Date: 7/22/2015 5:07:00 PM
What a wonderful and excellent penned............A.M.
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:26:00 PM
This is the exact second time which I have read this form Haibun dear poet, and the 2nd which has impressed me enough to want to indulge in it's strict allegence ! TY... Wonderful depiction of life, and I especially loved this write because me and my 3iyr ol son were talking today of the wonderful sage of our competent elderly this system of things are neglecting to realize the importance of, if even for the honest smile ! Have a blessed week Carrie...much love, james
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Date: 7/19/2015 3:18:00 PM
Such vivid descriptive imagery Carrie good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx7
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