Scars

In this world of stress Sweetie you stare around yourself Scared and tired from the war in your head I love you A scar of ivory color disrupted by crimson appears Internally I scream the words for you to stop You carry on, holding yourself tightly I still will always love you Handed you was the blade Tears were welled in your orbs of bleakness Another scar of ivory disrupted with crimson I'll still love you Your eyes were have open staring at me Crimson poured around you The ivory was covering your arms I love you still....

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Manmath Dalei

Date: 5/18/2016 1:08:00 AM

Rachael, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead...........//:) hugs

Skat A

Date: 5/15/2016 12:30:00 PM

Rachel, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/15/2016 1:05:00 AM

Rachael, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Moon Flower

Date: 5/14/2016 10:13:00 PM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Rachel. :)

Ninette Carey

Date: 5/14/2016 9:33:00 PM

Never Surrender Your Beautiful Soul... To any earthly demon.....They are "nothing". These demons choose self... They will implode....... Leave them to their own demise....... Tend to your scars..... You will heal..... And your wounds will give strength....Your Beautiful Soul....will Triumph......for your pain is pure....Make it your Sword.... Command ..... And Believe in You!!!

Sonia Walker

Date: 5/14/2016 8:49:00 PM

Rachel, your poem invites interpretation from others. After reading your poem, "Scars," I feel you are writing about an individual who has mental problems and cannot communicate outside of his/her sphere of paranoia. You are welcome to read, "Beth's Straw Bonnet." It was written about my daughter, Beth, who suffered from profound retardation and palsy. All the best, Sonia.