Saturday Afternoon

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Fervent redbirds began to croon, As onyx shadows danced in tune, Idle afternoon of peacock plumes, amid greenness and floral fumes. Saffron sunshine forever resumes, with memories of pale, pink moon. Gardener's pride, flowers maroon, seeking the usual golden fortune, under skies of lost purple balloon, and mystery clouds, leaving soon. Wistful, aging Saturday afternoon!

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Christina Bowring

Date: 5/17/2024 11:03:00 PM

Dear Evelyn, this is a stunning read. You have captured so much with your beautiful imagery and always so artistic use of colour - one of the best. This is a tranquil monorhyme with a lovely calm feel and perfect rhyme. ‘ Ideal afternoon of peacock plumes’ ‘ under skies of lost purple balloon’ So imaginative and you have captured that lazy afternoon feel, unrushed, so well. That last line with the wistful, aging afternoon is amazing. Loved it! Hugs and blessings dear friend for a

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/18/2024 10:11:00 PM

Thank you for your very kind remarks, which gladden me, dear friend. It's very nice to know you took away such positive feelings from this poem. I wish you blessings of many peaceful Saturdays afternoons. :)

Christina Bowring
Date: 5/17/2024 11:03:00 PM

lovely, peaceful Saturday afternoon! Xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/17/2024 1:08:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your creative write & picture for tomorrow. "Saturday Afternoon" What a great day of the week.... Have A Blessed Weekend Writing Away..........

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2024 7:12:00 PM

Thank you, dear Paula. I am much gratified by your precious comment. I do hope your weekend is blessed, too. :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/17/2024 11:14:00 AM

Evelyn, in your wonderfully composed monorhyme you have expressed a wistful, lazy Saturday afternoon in a garden shining with "saffron sunshine" and "onyx shadows." What wonderful and evocative images bloom in your words. I always love your masterful use of color! And your reference to time as an aging afternoon is marvelous! Blessings to you my friend. May all of your Saturday afternoons be as serene as your poem!

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2024 7:04:00 PM

Sam, I love the way your insightful, warm remarks always add sunshine to my day. Thank you for your kind words, my friend. I hope your upcoming Saturday afternoon is wonderful. :)