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Santa's Special Delivery: a Collab

Brutal was the biting wind, sweeping brown locks of a tiny urchin side to side, often hiding her eyes. Oversized slippers she had donned were lost in deep snow drifts. She plodded forth barefoot, risking frostbite. Little daylight remained to guide her; a dangerous holiday trek she undertook. Villagers in passing carriages didn't notice her. With snow falling fast and accumulations growing deep, she didn't realize she'd left the main road. If only she could find her grandfather's cottage! For Christmas Eve it was, but in her heart there was no joy. Her cruel stepmother’s house she left in search of love. As darkness fell, the biting cold increased. Her weary legs she dragged; with teary eyes she searched in vain, for only shadows could she see. A green-clad elf with lantern lit was homeward bound deep in the woods, when all at once he spied this forlorn girl, sprawled on the snow deprived of strength and shivering. He shone the light on her white face; eyelids moved and flickered. He read her thoughts and understood; he knew just how to help her. No time was lost; his crystal flute he blew to call his trusted friends. An entire family of elves pulled the shivering child, placing her gently on a sled, fully decked out in Christmas flare. The elves had been on their way to Santa; Yuletide deliveries had to be made, but the wee girl's plight took priority. Once she was aboard the sled, reindeer arrived on cue, ushering the crew to the North Pole. The little girl came to quickly, nestled in Santa's arms. With pleasure he brought her to her grandfather's cottage. Grandfather sat alone by his roaring fire when a knock came to the door. He went to see who it could be so late into the night. There on the doorstep his young granddaughter stood with shining eyes, a dream come true for those who never give up hope. He picked her up in welcome arms, a warm embrace of love. The clock struck twelve. They heard the sound of jingling bells as Santa waved goodbye and off he sped across the sky. Christmas had arrived, and his first gift had been delivered! [Inspired by the first paragraph of The Little Match Girl by H.C. Andersen] --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Co-written by: Paul Callus~Carolyn Devonshire~Valentina Stagno-Navarra Contest: A Christmas Tale Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi Placed: 1st

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Date: 1/11/2015 9:14:00 PM
Paul, congratulations on your win. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 1/9/2015 3:55:00 AM
Big congratulations on your winning collaboration taking top honors Paul! A wonderful heartwarming piece!
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/9/2015 7:10:00 AM
Thank you Connie. Writing this poem served to get us into an early festive mood! So pleased that you enjoyed our tale and found it heartwarming. // paul
Date: 1/6/2015 8:58:00 PM
Paul, you really had my attention, such a gift to be delivered. Congratulations on your win and a 7+++
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/7/2015 12:44:00 PM
Many thanks Eve, both for the wishes and the rating. Being Christmas it was only fair that we would opt for a happy ending with an ideal delivery! Pleased that you enjoyed. // paul
Date: 1/6/2015 2:15:00 AM
I know very well from the start that it will bag a top spot.. :)! congrats on you two.. :)! treaaaaaaaaaat for me!!!!! hahaha
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Date: 1/6/2015 11:54:00 AM
Thank you Olive_eloi! "Any treat will do, as long as it's as sweet as you!" Hugs // paul
Date: 1/6/2015 12:16:00 AM
A great collaboration Paul. No doubt excellence is your trade mark; congrats on the win to all these team players especially to you Paul de Great...huggs
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/6/2015 12:00:00 PM
Many thanks Kayode! I read all the entries, including yours, and I can honestly say that all of them were very worthy of being on the winners' list; enjoyed them all. hugs // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 10:53:00 PM
A heartwarming story and a great collab... .Congrats on the win
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/6/2015 12:02:00 PM
Thank you Joseph. This threesome co-write was an experimental one which gladly paid dividends:) All the best. // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 5:48:00 PM
Back to congratulate the colab of three on your win.
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Date: 1/6/2015 12:09:00 PM
Very nice of you to return with congrats, my friend Armand. You are indeed very supportive! Cheers // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 1:47:00 PM
Congratulations, Paul on your win for this wonderful collab created by you and Carolyn and, I see, your granddaughter too! Loved it! Sandra
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Date: 1/6/2015 12:07:00 PM
So pleased you found this tale to your liking, Sandra! Thank you, in the name of all three of us! Take care. // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 11:45:00 AM
Many many congrats Paul Carolyn and especially young VALENTINA - you guys rock:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 1/6/2015 12:07:00 PM
Aww bless Paul in a few years time she will give us a run for our money with her incredible talent:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/6/2015 12:05:00 PM
Hi Jan! Showed Valentina your comment and she's as proud as a peacock seeing her name mentioned here; sends you a big X. Hugs // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 8:11:00 AM
Wonderful write, congrats to both of you, Paul
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/6/2015 12:03:00 PM
So was yours, Dr! Thank you for your welcome visit. // paul
Date: 1/5/2015 12:02:00 AM
Paul my friend Congratulations on win. Love and respect. Hope you are okay and enjoying life. God bless you. Rajat
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/6/2015 11:58:00 AM
Thank you Rajat. So far the new year has been kind; being kept very busy and would like to find more time for writing! See you my friend. // paul
Date: 12/28/2014 3:56:00 PM
Another collab from you two...this time with an extra helper. Lovely story. Well told.
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Date: 12/29/2014 7:07:00 AM
Good day Eileen! Like you I have been busy, but trying to fit in Soup visits as well. I think I've read all your latest poems now. The extra helper this time is my young granddaughter Valentina; she is an avid bookworm and likes poetry. Wishing you all the best...hugs // paul
Date: 12/25/2014 11:03:00 PM
Paul, a wonderful collab... Stopping by to say hi, and wish you the best... Enjoy your days and the coming New Year. Love ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/21/2014 5:29:00 PM
Paul, I realized I would probably never do this story telling challenge because I do not feel inspired by any of the story intros she gave us. wish we could just use our very own story!!!
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/22/2014 8:17:00 AM
Hi Andrea, you are not one who throws in the towel so easily! The story intro is just a starter, the rest will all be fruit of your own imagination. Go for it:)) // paul
Date: 12/17/2014 5:55:00 PM
Great story here my friend enjoyed it alot, simply wonderful, thanks for sharing your Christmas Story with me, excellently put together and a joy to read, cheri
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/18/2014 6:39:00 AM
Thank you Cherl for stopping by with lovely comments about our Christmas co-write. You're always a most welcome visitor. Take care. // paul
Date: 12/17/2014 5:16:00 PM
An outstanding Christmas Story !!Awesome!!
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Date: 12/18/2014 6:42:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed, Charm. It's always lovely to have you stopping by. // paul
Date: 12/16/2014 10:51:00 AM
This is so precious my dear friend Paul. An outstanding Christmas tale which I extremely enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing. Thanks a lot as well for sharing your precious time stopping by. Have a wonderful holiday season to you and your loved ones my very dear friend and all the best for 2015! Biggest hug to you! love lots, Leonora
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/16/2014 11:31:00 AM
Thank you dear Leonora. It's my pleasure to visit your posts, time permitting. So glad you enjoyed this co-written Christmas Tale. May you enjoy this joyous festive season. Hugs /x/ paul
Date: 12/15/2014 10:46:00 AM
this is really very beautifully penned paul golden piece pal
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/15/2014 3:39:00 PM
Thank you Liam; three minds worked on this write, but I suppose it's hard to tell who wrote which parts. Enjoyed your Christmas offering, too. // paul
Date: 12/15/2014 12:24:00 AM
still have not thought of one, Paul, but i came up with three contest poems today, two yet to be posted. It feels good!!!
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/15/2014 6:27:00 AM
Sounds like the balance is tipping to the positive side! It's hard to handle all contests, time is unforgiving. I was off for a couple of days and it is not going to be easy catching up on mail, let alone contests!:) I'll go have a look at your latest posts. // paul
Date: 12/14/2014 1:27:00 AM
I just felt as if I were reading a classic Christmas story from years gone by. The wording was very beautiful... An excellent Christmas tale! Good luck to you Paul and your co-writer!
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 3:52:00 PM
Thank you Kelly...both for reading and enjoying. Yes, my co-writers deserve praise for a job well done! Hope you had a lovely weekend. hugs // paul
Date: 12/13/2014 4:39:00 PM
love this beautiful co write, Paul
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 3:53:00 PM
Thank you Jack. Carolyn is great to write with...and my young granddaughter is learning the tricks of the trade:) cheers // paul
Date: 12/13/2014 9:58:00 AM
Thought I would give this magical Tale another read, yep still pretty amazing!
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 3:43:00 PM
Thank you for revisiting Richard...I take it that's a good sign! // paul
Date: 12/13/2014 8:59:00 AM
So amazing, I am at a lost for words. Just a wonderful story with a perfect ending. A Fav.
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 3:30:00 PM
Many thanks Maurice!! Both your lovely comments and fave are much appreciated! So pleased that you enjoyed. // paul
Date: 12/13/2014 1:05:00 AM
A touching story with a wonderful ending Paul. Great minds collaborating, creating this gem!
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 2:59:00 PM
Thank you for the lovely comments, Connie! Both Carolyn and Valentina will be pleased to hear what you had to say:) Take care // paul
Date: 12/12/2014 10:44:00 PM
Brilliantly penned Paul. I love this amazing story. I never liked the original because I hate sad endings. This is what I call a perfect ending.
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Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 2:55:00 PM
I'm so glad you found this more likeable than the original, Brenda! Happy endings beat sad ones any time, especially for the festive season! Thank you for the 'perfect' comments:) // paul
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