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Sanctioned Screaming

I close my eyes, think of myself as being there to where screams are free to roam, then bounce back, immune to tortured souls allowed to spread in waves For some reason, Ararat comes to mind right now but to be honest, Arayat should suffice surrender, surrender... Surrender All these rocks-- can I disturb you? Even just this once. let me let out my sanctioned screaming, and release it to these mountains. 8420161147p851206a

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Nathan D.

Date: 11/20/2011 11:08:00 AM

ha ha poor bastard deserves never to find a lovely lady to love him

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 11/16/2011 1:35:00 AM

This sad poem gets DIGGit points from me! I love hearing from you! Thx, your comments and help are always appreciated. I did mean to use "exercised" in this case for the sake of wordplay. Mario, was a kid who never exercised (lifted weights,ect.) b4 prison. Exercise was key in helping the 7 years go by. He also became a poet! Mario requested it to be published. Upon , I will notify my editor/Publisher of the spelling change. Thank you, please continue to help if possible ~JOEY

Daver Austin

Date: 11/15/2011 2:48:00 PM

Love the theme, because that is what it comes down to after so many years, just a "blink." Great stuff, nikko. Love, daver

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 11/15/2011 9:44:00 AM

now that i read this again, i still think lonliness, but perhaps the woman in the red dress is a memory of the speaker? remembering happier times before something came between them. (just another thought about how it could be interpreted) hope you are well :)

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 11/15/2011 6:39:00 AM

Sad, but passionatly perceptive about life and love lost. Wonderful poetry. (And thank you for being a community builder and for unselfishly sharing your time to read and encourage poetry on this site. My life took a swift new direction about 8 months ago, and I have not been able to reciprocate. My thanks go to every community builder who enjoys poetry and encourages other poets, like I once tried to do. I love you…all! Lovingly, Dane Ann)

Fabiyas M V

Date: 11/15/2011 6:30:00 AM

I have already commented on this work.Thank you for reading mine.The title of my kite poem is The Kite(second page)

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 11/14/2011 9:08:00 PM

This moved me Nikko, I too can feel the aloneness you speak of and the end wraps it up with that touch of eloquence you give so easily. A specail one indeed!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/14/2011 6:09:00 AM

Wow...I'm a cracker in a box....always getting crushed..on accident or purpose.. Nikko.. A very deep poem... That is why I never blink.... Unless I want sadness.... Anyways... My angle of light never leaves me... And I see things clearer in the dark...all alone... Like..now... Always, luv~p.d

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 11/14/2011 9:00:00 AM

good thing I clicked here-- heehee actually, I was thinking, is pd going all technical on me, talking about lighting and angles?? and come on, how I hope you're not all alone?

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 11/14/2011 6:10:00 AM

Angel...that is.lol

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 11/13/2011 11:51:00 PM

Thanks for catching my error. I fixed it to the way it was meant. My eyes must have been "worn out"

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/13/2011 3:46:00 PM

hey , NIkko, thanks for all your sweet comments today, here and at PFT. Luv ya,Andrea

Gwendolen Song

Date: 11/13/2011 2:15:00 PM

I came back to this poem today hungry for another Nikko write....I shall just engross myself in the 2nd stanza. Just this scene alone is a pleasure to read. It stands alone as a poem of its own...frolicking and making footprints in the sand, imitating a crab's awkward walk. You wrote this sooo well. This scene represents a light hearted interaction between 2 lovers. So much flavor! ......hey , where's lil batty today. You should place a live cam in your mango tree. I'm curious what he's doin.

Broken Butterfly

Date: 11/13/2011 10:05:00 AM

This is really super nikko. I think sometimes I am stuck in that bottle too. I want to thank you for spotting my spelling error. I think that is awesome that you helped me. It could have cost me the contest. I mean I might not place anyways but with a spelling error for sure I would not.

Date: 11/13/2011 10:04:00 AM

Creative use of personification. The emotion comes through your words. Thank you for sharing them with us and for your kind comment. Have a good week. Karen

Wilma Neels

Date: 11/12/2011 11:44:00 AM

Sometimes that bottle become a comfort and we get so use to being in our own space it's scary.. love this piece Missy.. so many emotions evoked in me ;) hopefully you are in dreamland by now!! *mwahugs*

Fabiyas M V

Date: 11/12/2011 7:04:00 AM

Fantastic write,Nikko.'a ship in bottle' great expression, which reveals everything.Lovinly,FAB.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 11/12/2011 3:47:00 AM

Hi Nikko~Yipeeee! You got that pen of yours back to work! You left your fans sitting here all alone...as tho we were in a bottle just waiting for you to walk by. ha ha. This is the most unique angle for a poem..Encapsulated, alone,...reaching out....this is mar-vel-ous! It is true that everything seems so distorted when you suffer from loneliness...u captured the essence of this emotion so well. Hats off to you....(hats off to your pet bat too!!) Gwendolen

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2011 1:03:00 AM

gosh, Nikko. what a wonder you are. Your poetic vision is so unique and your style is one of a kind. I would love to know what inspired this one and who is that couple you are watching!

James Peranteau

Date: 11/11/2011 7:20:00 PM

I loved the personification in this write dear poet....a sad lonely road, being a human. Great write Nikko ! hAVE A WONDERFUL WEEKEND....MUCH LOVE, JAMES

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/11/2011 3:51:00 PM

Very creative way of writing this one..Enjoyed reading this eve..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/11/2011 1:00:00 PM

What a brilliant analogy, Nikko, comparing loneliness to a ship in a bottle. There are a lot of people who shut themselves off from the outside world. It's a very lonely place to be. Sad message, but beautifully written! Love, Carolyn

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 11/11/2011 12:51:00 PM

What a write!!! I love the ship in a bottle theme, you have raised the bar on Poetry here... love and hugs all day for you... Michael