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Sailor's Lament

There once was a sailor named Baelon Who loved nothin' better than sailin' But when he returned His new bride he learned Had given him 10 babes a' wailin' ~deborah burch 4/01/2012

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Terry L. Allen

Date: 4/27/2012 10:25:00 PM

Sounds like she was crusin while he was sailin. This is cute made me chuckle. Well done. Now I have one for you. I am such a bad widdle girl tonight in my humor. Hope you like. Huggs TLee

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/11/2012 7:22:00 AM

You really seem to be hearing the meter! Hearing the limerick meter with its UP's and downs..and down, down UP's..is what FINALLY inabled me to HEAR iambic..go figure? I needed the sing songie-ness? I have a great book of limericks called Piggericks I highly sugest it! I hestitated to read your limerick as input #1 for so many are not using meter, what a pleasant surprise! [This one need a wee bit of polish on line 5 & using the ' to replace the g and shorten the sound is a VERY good plausible thing to do in a write not meant to take its content too seriously!] THANKS so much for what you said in my blog! Wish I'd read it before sleep I fretted all night!

Deborah Burch
Date: 4/11/2012 8:01:00 AM

Debbie, thank you so much!! :) I shall look for "Piggericks"...these were my first attempts...after *PD's dino contest(my first limerick) I decided to try them..."Unlucky Penny" was first and "A Pirate" was last... tweeking is always a good thing...lol...I meant all I said in your blog...life is short dear...we must choose our battles and carry on...wearing our big girl panties ;) Laughter is good medicine...I wish you much of it today...big huggsss,love debs

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 4/4/2012 7:27:00 AM

ha! the poor sap! great limerick :P

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/3/2012 9:35:00 PM

hahaha, by ten other guys methinks!! VERY fun!!!

David Williams

Date: 4/2/2012 1:03:00 AM

Deborah very funny indeed, thanks for your comments and I hope you will enter my contest..David

Deborah Burch
Date: 4/2/2012 1:18:00 AM

Quite welcome David...and I do plan to give it a go...thank you so much...big huggsss,love deb