Sail Away

everyone's gone now alone with my memories of the time we had at last the boat is ready sail away now on my tears

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/16/2015 9:33:00 AM

I really like this one. I have seen many great tanka on grief that did not make the HM list of the judge in that last contest. OH MY! I will sail away with you on this one.

Constance La France

Date: 2/12/2015 12:41:00 PM

Barbara, your tanka is so sadly beautiful, well done and thanks for the visit ~~

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 2/9/2015 9:42:00 AM

This is just an excellent piece and a brilliant tear-filled Tanka that I give a "7"! Great work, Barbara. Best wishes. Pandita.

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 2/9/2015 7:43:00 AM

What a great and unexpected last line to your tanka, Barbara! A blue ribbon tanka! BTW, kick your husband harder to make him move! Thanks for the stop./ M

Poesy Relish

Date: 2/9/2015 5:44:00 AM

a nice take on the topic barbara... good luck

Tim Smith

Date: 2/8/2015 11:21:00 PM

A very sad tanka BG....as we age more and more of our loved ones have sailed away before us...hugs Tim