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Saffron Sun

Saffron sun Your amber-umber eyes, penetrate me as saffron sun sets on faces, ashen Your suspicious mind raves with jealousy as pumpkin winds chill our summers passion September 3,2020 Excerpt taken from my poem Autumn's desires originally written September 16,2017 John Derek Hamilton

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Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/21/2020 7:51:00 AM

Such a vivid description of love going wrong, John! CONGRATS on your win. Janice

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 11:55:00 AM

Thanks Janice

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/20/2020 10:09:00 PM

Okay!.... This needs a couple of reads to divulge more emotion. Very nicely unwound tale of love and loss. I pick up a lot of tension and sadness from the mistimed venture. Beautiful work. Look forward to reading AD to absorb more of the story. Congratulations, well earned, John!!

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:20:00 AM

Thanks Sigrid, glad your assessment was positive, I'm sure you'll like the original from which it was taken.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/20/2020 5:33:00 PM

Congratulations, John! Lovely imagery with those pumpkin winds!

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Kim, glad you liked it!

Elaine George

Date: 9/20/2020 4:08:00 PM

LOVELY 4 LINES JOHN, MANY CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN. ~Elaine

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2020 2:09:00 PM

So glad to see this on the list!! Congrats to you!

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Andrea a nice surprise for sure!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/20/2020 10:43:00 AM

How the colors of fall are woven with love in splendid words. Congrats John on your win.

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Jeanne

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/20/2020 9:09:00 AM

What a dynamic use of color, John! I like the contrast of color to "ashen" and the weaving of the seasons into the passing of the summer love. Really nicely done! Congratulations on your winning placement.

John Hamilton
Date: 9/21/2020 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Sam what a nice surprise I'll have to check the winners circle, I didn't know Greg had judged it already!

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/7/2020 10:45:00 AM

John, I remember the original poem, "Autumn Desires", that this verse comes from, as we both share a love of the term 'saffron sun'. This stunning stanza is even more striking in its beauty and potency as a stand alone poem. A great choice for the contest. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, dear poet.. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/7/2020 11:24:00 AM

Your sweet sentiments touch my heart, my friend, and I'm sure this one will be at the top of Greg's win list :) I will look into your contest for sure and see if I can conjure a sonnet that's worthy..

John Hamilton
Date: 9/7/2020 11:14:00 AM

So nice to have you back Susan, we've missed your artistry, thanks for your kind words, let's see what Greg thinks, would be great if you wrote for my new contest, look forward to your entry! Take care John

John Fleming

Date: 9/4/2020 10:58:00 PM

Just read through your original poem, Autumn's desires...I think, with your talents, this could be made rather nice when set to music...a slow, sort of crooning song sang in a low and deliberate fashion might suit well. Has your unique writing style splashed all over it, John! G.L in the contest. :) john

John Hamilton
Date: 9/5/2020 6:21:00 AM

Thanks John, I'm so grateful for your taking the time to read and comment on some of my older poems as well. I find it interesting that you think some of my poems could also be songs...interesting...very interesting!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2020 2:30:00 PM

oh I just love all that colorful autumn imagery going on in this poem. wonderful!

John Hamilton
Date: 9/5/2020 6:19:00 AM

Thanks Andrea

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/3/2020 4:26:00 PM

Love this, John! Wondrous colors of Fall!

John Hamilton
Date: 9/3/2020 5:27:00 PM

Thanks Kim glad you came by today, did you hear my new song today?