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Sacrifice

Swirling, pulsing, and throbbing through air came a cloud, not quite black, above my bed, not closing my eyes and watching in fear, Death would be easy but the cloud was my dread. Looking closer, I viewed a darkening black spot two thirds of the way down the visage's form. It grew, spun, shrunk as though it were hot. My head seemed electric as though in a storm. I jumped from the bed wanting a fight. The cloud backed away, I thought setting me free. I grabbed at its shoulders holding on tight, Saying Death take no one, but take only me. I kicked the spot with best martial art, thus causing the form to fold with a cry. We tumbled to hell, there never to part. I sacrificed life, and in hell I would die.

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Date: 3/9/2024 4:53:00 AM
So sorry for the loss of your husband. It is a cruel disease.
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Hilda Greenhough
Date: 3/9/2024 6:17:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 2/6/2024 9:39:00 PM
WOW, nice first post, Hilda. Very engaging poetry. I like you spirit to take on the cloud to save everyone else. Courageous to say the least. Welcome to Poetry Soup 5 months late. :-) I like to go back and read first post once I get to know a person's poetry a little. This was worth the time and effort, my friend. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Hilda Greenhough
Date: 2/7/2024 2:32:00 AM
Thank you. This poem was based on how my husband's Alzheimers appeared to me.
Date: 1/1/2024 2:52:00 PM
A very interesting take on sacrifice. This kind of sacrifice requires a lot of caring for the rest of humanity.
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Hilda Greenhough
Date: 1/4/2024 2:15:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 9/30/2023 9:15:00 AM
This is quite the first poem for the soup. A good use of personification. Welcome to poetry Soup. Thanks as well for your visit.
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Hilda Greenhough
Date: 10/1/2023 8:43:00 AM
Thank you. It was inspired by my now deceased husband's Alzheimer's delusions.
Date: 9/20/2023 7:04:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
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Hilda Greenhough
Date: 10/1/2023 8:44:00 AM
Thank you.

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