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How long did it take her to be free? How long did it take For the wingless dragonfly to finally open her heart to the world How long did it take for her to overcome Devil’s workshop Slowly caressing her retinas With silky daffodils and two-faced tulips Where Now She dives into a glistening pool of complicated risk Opening her atrium to the masses Shedding incumbent teardrops Just for that one standing ovation To SET HER FREE! It was then Where pieces of plastic chains fell from demure stratosphere Dented taps, similar to a shoeless dancer, Setting off bass tones and low-key monotony For she was One cholesterol filled syllable short To be genuine One tearful, hyphenated lyric Too blunt To be embraced by their “god” One dilapidated vowel shy Of being honest Her diary didn’t have enough pages torn From emerald sanity There were too many “Wows”, Diluting into disingenuous shoulder pats Her stanza pushed aside A glorified booty call with no call back number Leaving messages towards empty dial tones … How long will it take her to be free? Until she looks up Knowing she already holds the key ©Drake J. Eszes

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Date: 2/13/2014 7:24:00 PM
Freedom Drake is what we all want to be, but yet sometimes we are bound by the simple things of life. The question is just what you said. "How long will it take to be free?' Another mind opener, greatly written.
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Date: 2/13/2014 10:51:00 PM
I wholly agree! It's very nice to meet you, Lillie! Thank you very much!
Date: 10/30/2013 6:00:00 PM
You have soup in your mail : )
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Date: 10/30/2013 7:18:00 PM
Ok. :)
Date: 6/9/2013 9:59:00 AM
Love the theme. You have written energetic inspiration to keep doing what burns inside of us even when we feel discouraged. The metaphor in this is spectacular :)
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Date: 6/9/2013 10:04:00 AM
You got that right. ;) Thank you so much, Karen!
Date: 6/4/2013 3:59:00 AM
What a powerful and beautiful ending, Drake! :) Freedom lies within us. Love that thought! The imagery is so intricate... HUGS!
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Date: 6/4/2013 7:19:00 AM
You got that right. ;) I seriously appreciate your commentary on this. Thanks so much!
Date: 5/28/2013 1:37:00 AM
cont..Its the heart's tick tock..Do i get it or am i an ignoramus hi ho ?: ) Many poems WOW me to use your WoWs above but then there are others which get a bit deeper beneath my skin..tickling my senses making me want to read more..Going to my favs :)
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Date: 5/28/2013 1:37:00 PM
Yes, it should go beyond the R&R. But, not always. Sadly. You are no "ignoramus hi ho". LOL You're pretty on point with your perspective of this. And I'm happy to tickle your senses. Mission accomplished. :) Thanks so much, Charmaine!
Date: 5/28/2013 1:32:00 AM
A lady dragon fly opening her atrium to the masses using her key..Wishing its a master key to all empty holes of their heart.It is risky indeed to open the atrium to the masses not knowing if she ll be loved of her believes and thoughts penned.Sometimes we care so much of what others think about us and our writing.We just want to please them too much but the best words flow when we don t think of what others are expecting and let our soul free.Poetry goes beyond rules and regulations.
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Date: 5/22/2013 12:58:00 AM
nice
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Date: 5/22/2013 6:29:00 AM
Hi, Ruth! Thank you much!
Date: 5/19/2013 12:44:00 AM
Each line is rich in detail that creates an extraordinary journey for the reader. I see a struggling poet needing to unleash confidence. Great writing :)
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Date: 5/19/2013 7:06:00 AM
You're on track. The problem is that the poet faces a hypocrisy amongst others who have already done the same. Yet, they're telling that poet how it should be done. Which is pointless & entirely ironic. Thank you so much for stopping by, Karen. :)
Date: 5/17/2013 9:36:00 AM
nicely worded piece here.thanks for your visit.take care
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Date: 5/17/2013 9:38:00 AM
Hi Colleen! Thanks so much! Hope to see you again soon!
Date: 5/16/2013 7:21:00 PM
okay, time;s up.. it;s been a week!.. see your new poem soon.. tag!..:) huggs
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Date: 5/16/2013 11:45:00 PM
It's been 2 days! LOL You're adorable. More soon. ;)
Date: 5/16/2013 6:29:00 AM
Its been a while Drake but I can tell your serious about poetry. I look at this piece as one woulg a fine painting. Good job! Very good job! Jhlovingiii
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Date: 5/16/2013 7:47:00 AM
Hey there, John! It's been quite a while. I think we all know somebody like that. Thank you for your very kind words!
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Date: 5/16/2013 6:30:00 AM
Wonder if I know her.
Date: 5/16/2013 12:00:00 AM
wow! this is nice. I like the figurative languages you used here... and thank you for visiting my page---keep smiling, Elai
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Date: 5/16/2013 7:41:00 AM
Hi there, Elai! :) Thank you so very much. I certainly will.
Date: 5/15/2013 9:28:00 PM
Ya know some poems are great with just the first line..this is one of them..the rest just adds the spice. Great job...
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Date: 5/15/2013 9:38:00 PM
Hey there, Donna!!! :) That's awesome of you to say. Thank you so much! YAY FOR SPICE!
Date: 5/15/2013 8:57:00 AM
This is really very beautiful poem and image! You're indeed a great poet my dear friend Drake! An outstanding gem and masterpiece! Thank you so much for sharing and your very inspiring comment on my poem! Have a great day! love and hugs, Leonora
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Date: 5/15/2013 8:59:00 AM
Hi there, Leonora! I really appreciate your words on this. Many thanks to you!
Date: 5/15/2013 8:11:00 AM
Sometimes our wondering questions become answers filled with wonderment. You, too, holds the key to unlocking mysteries in poetic wonderment! Thanks for sharing, Jake, and thanks for your visit and comment! David
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Date: 5/15/2013 8:33:00 AM
Good morning, David! Couldn't agree more with you. Thank you so much for stopping by!
Date: 5/15/2013 6:54:00 AM
You sure have a way with words. I love the images you have conjured up here, simply breathtaking.
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Date: 5/15/2013 7:29:00 AM
Thank you very, very much Richard! I do what I can. :)
Date: 5/14/2013 5:32:00 PM
deeper still than daffidills, 2 faced tulips on parade, magic of poetry instils, the words and spells charade... good one mate....
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Date: 5/14/2013 5:50:00 PM
Hey Don! Thanks so much for that! :)
Date: 5/14/2013 12:58:00 PM
I've been seeing your name a lot around here and finally decided to check out your page. I am impressed! There were many above-and-beyond good lines, but my favorite was this... "She dives into a glistening pool of complicated risk"... that right there is GOLD! I don't know who you wrote this for, but she's one lucky girl to have this written for... superb job!
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Date: 5/14/2013 1:08:00 PM
Hi, Tim!!!! Nice to meet you! :) That's truly kind of you to say. To be honest, I didn't write this for any lady in particular. That said, I did mean for it to resonate with others. Thanks so much for stopping by!
Date: 5/14/2013 10:25:00 AM
gotta hand it to you,drake... this style of writing is like an examination of the spirit... and that somehow it seems glorious, absurd, abstract, sad and yet all too beauifully mixed like glimpses of life... wow!..:) huggs
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Date: 5/14/2013 10:47:00 AM
(Blush) Your words are uplifting. I'm pleased that you truly grasp where I'm going with this. A glimpse, indeed. :) Thank you so much!
Date: 5/14/2013 9:49:00 AM
- Drake, a wonderful poem .......... top rated from me! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/14/2013 9:59:00 AM
Hi, Anne Lise! :) Thank you so very much! You're too kind.
Date: 5/14/2013 8:30:00 AM
Brilliant. :) Love it
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Date: 5/14/2013 8:30:00 AM
Hi Sasha! Thank you so much! :)
Date: 5/14/2013 8:30:00 AM
Excellent poem-- love the form and use of antonyms and analogy's you have incorporated to describe the subject matter. Loved the line" Her diary didn't have enough pages torn from emerald sanity"
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Date: 5/14/2013 8:31:00 AM
Hi Kim! :) I'm pleased you noticed that! Thank you so very much!

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