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Rose Coloured Lies

Rose Coloured Lies* Dark is the night of my years Stained is your note with my tears Dropped from my hand… Windows reflect all my fears Shattered by fragmented weirs Beneath the rand Rose among thorns with no shears Coloured last blush no one hears Lies in times sand. --DARK STAINED DROPPED WINDOWS SHATTERED BENEATH ROSE COLOURED LIES…-- deborahburch© 07/23/2012 I call this form: VIRELETTE* It is like the Virelai in its structure of line and syllable make-up...the variation is with the word beginning each line. Each word combined in sequence creates another poem, which is a synopsis of the original poem...LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK... :) deb

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/15/2013 4:04:00 PM

This is a good publishable verse too Deb. Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/4/2013 7:57:00 AM

Oh I like the form why not run a contest using it..L & L

Joann Grisetti

Date: 10/23/2012 2:38:00 PM

I like this new form of poem. i was looking for new poems by you and found this gem. OK if I try one?

David Williams

Date: 7/25/2012 1:30:00 AM

Cap'n Deb, now I think this is very cool, I like the name of it and the idea that it makes another poem is good...I did one that made a sepertae poem, but yours is different in the sense that it is the first word you use to make the new poem, I will give this a go, I like it...well done...David

David Williams

Date: 7/24/2012 1:55:00 AM

Cap'n Deb, I like this a lot, rose coloured lies are better than pre-concieved ones in my book...luv ya.....David

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 7/24/2012 12:59:00 AM

Another good one debs but unlike you xx