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I know that I am dying, I am fading fast, my life is almost over, by tomorrow I will be dead; and I find myself on a grave stone draped in quietus, come the next dawn- I will be withered gone. A girl brought me to this vast place of deep tears, her sad weeping wet my soft red velvet petals; she had plucked me from my shade in her little garden, oh, I was so happy there growing by the fence. I heard her say the word baby in her sadness, then she placed me gently on this cold tomb to die; will I bring the baby peace- will the baby know me, soon we are alone, baby and me- hello I whisper. My name is Rose, soon I will join you in the other world, that night I watched the moon and stars above; for the last time I knew the dawn and then I gasped, all was still - I was in the hand of a child. The child pressed me to his lips and kissed me beautiful, my petals were no longer brittle cold but lovely; and here we lay under the blue azure sky and cool earth, a rose and a baby boy, joined in death by eternal love. For years we listen to birds singing and wind sighing, the rain gently falling and snowflakes drifting in winter; birds in circled flight above and distant whispers of love, and the tears of an old woman falling on our tomb. ____________________ August 23, 2016 Verse/Personification/Rose Copyright Protected, ID 16-822-769-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, And In The Words, She Blooms sponsor, Casarah Nance First Place

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Date: 9/15/2016 3:17:00 PM
Wow. Love the image of the rose passing to the baby. Beautiful and creepy at the same time.
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Date: 9/15/2016 6:03:00 AM
Lots of congratulations. This is brilliant. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 9/15/2016 3:00:00 AM
Well-placed and deserved number 1, lovely work Constance
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Date: 9/14/2016 7:39:00 PM
As always, your poem comes from deep within your own experience. Congratulations on your first place win, Constance!
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Date: 9/14/2016 1:55:00 PM
Comparing the wilted rose to the dead baby, I see the comparison. Poignant and lovely Constance! Congratulations on your outstanding first placement! # 7 ; )
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Date: 9/14/2016 12:56:00 PM
Broken Wings, I am just back with my heartfelt congrats on your awesome top placement! well deserved :):) -luloo
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Date: 9/14/2016 12:22:00 PM
Wow this poem is a gem. Congratulations on your well deserved top placement, B.W.
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Date: 9/14/2016 12:02:00 PM
Beautiful just beautiful Constance:-) many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/26/2016 1:29:00 AM
Very beautiful...what a way to tell through the eyes of a rose:) Wish you all the best:)
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Date: 8/24/2016 5:50:00 PM
Memorable my sad lady!!! good work wirth the verse and personnification! Tom
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Date: 8/24/2016 10:51:00 AM
Broken Wings, just beautiful..I chose Rose too and yours is just marvelous lady...amazing...good luck :)-luloo
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Date: 8/24/2016 12:26:00 AM
Outstanding verse, Constance. It's amazing how you can take this similar theme and weave it again and again into something fresh and beautiful like this . FAVE. now I am caught up at last over here. A good night to you, sweet poet.
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Date: 8/23/2016 11:39:00 PM
This is lovely, BW, I take a shortcut into town when I walk, through a Crematorium, and the little children's area is the first area I walk through. A very poignant piece, beautifully done. Viv x
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