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River's Birth

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River's Birth

Vernal hills collect God’s tears
Torrents surge to shower’s edge
Pooling life’s essence begins
Life’s highway is born

Entry for John Freeman's Contest

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  1. Date: 2/26/2014 1:27:00 AM
    Congratulations John on your win... Well written succinct... Verlena

  1. Date: 2/26/2011 9:07:00 PM
    Congratulations on your Ist Place Win in John's contest, Shawn. Very well deserved. Enjoy! Always, Annalise

  1. Date: 2/26/2011 4:52:00 PM
    I know that God weeps but someday judgment will come..Congratulations on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 2/25/2011 6:18:00 AM
    Congratulations on this outstanding poem placing 1st in John's contest Shawn. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/25/2011 3:14:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 2/24/2011 11:52:00 PM
    A BIG congratulations to you, Shawn! Great metaphor of life.

  1. Date: 2/24/2011 6:26:00 PM
    Extremely happy to see you at the top Shawn. Congratulations on your worthy poem's first place honor, Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 1/23/2011 9:26:00 PM
    Thanks,Robert. Your suggestion is great and already implemented. Thanks:0) Shawn

  1. Date: 1/23/2011 8:33:00 PM
    Shawn, everything is quite descriptive. Your second line has one too many syllables. A suggestion: how about replacing "towards" with "to"? That will bring the line down to seven syllables.

  1. Date: 1/23/2011 6:14:00 PM
    good luck in the contest,, sure enjoyed the passion,..p.d,

  1. Date: 1/23/2011 4:05:00 PM
    Very nice and imaginative! It was a beautiful boat ride! Thank you for sharing! Steve