Get Your Premium Membership

River of Ribbons

RIVER OF RIBBONS River of jagged, ragged ribbons, Pretty, patterned pixels, of cold, steel, grey; Feathering, fanning, as it and the wind play. Play with water; water time, Play with water; water chime. River of smooth, wide, shard of black, Sleek and sombre, captor of light, reflecting, resting, within, its miracle sight. Play with water; water time, Play with water; water chime. River of ripples, rolling ribbons, Pretty, pitted points, of shadow and shade, Moving, constant, round and down; Mirror of Heron, Coot, and Buzzard invade. Play with water; water time, Play with water; water chime. River of living, breathing, and life Sleek pastures of silver and new; Travelling, transforming, from mist and dew; Play with water; water time, Play with water; water chime.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 4/12/2021 4:17:00 PM
I agree, I too like the use of repetition. A wonderful first write. Belated welcome to the soup.
Login to Reply
Lever Avatar
Janine Lever
Date: 4/24/2021 11:04:00 AM
Thank you richard for your comments. xx
Date: 7/26/2020 4:57:00 PM
A lovely song, indeed -- a few guitar strums and a beautiful voice singing it and nothing but loveliness in one's ear! I like it!
Login to Reply
Lever Avatar
Janine Lever
Date: 7/27/2020 10:45:00 AM
Thank you very much. I might try that. I strum just about 3 chords on guitar, and the voice was lovely, but now I sing a good blues, but I will try to see if I can sing this poem. However, when I sat writing it that day on the riverside, it sang itself to me. thank you again.
Date: 7/17/2020 12:43:00 PM
Lovely poem with, and please pardon the pun, a great flow to it Janine. Very descriptive. Cheers :) Gary
Login to Reply
Lever Avatar
Janine Lever
Date: 7/22/2020 9:39:00 AM
Thank you Gary, much appreciated.
Date: 7/17/2020 8:54:00 AM
Wonderful piece. The repetition of last two lines in each stanza gives a musical tone. Congratulations on your top WIN!
Login to Reply
Lever Avatar
Janine Lever
Date: 7/22/2020 9:41:00 AM
Thank you JCB BURL. Much appreciated. top win? Have I won something?

Book: Shattered Sighs