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River Line, meandering transparent ribbon of cold. Whirling companion, confusingly refreshing white gold, The road adjusts itself to the water's strong will. It lives Its wild and stubborn life, hardly able to be contained; Often it takes our lives, without its love we die, it gives. *** I will use here, for this poem: HOW MANY SYLLABLES. They tell me I have 14 syllables per line. For contest: Form - River Line Sponsor: Rick Parise

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Date: 11/26/2016 12:37:00 AM
Ah, loved it! That is archetypal relationship between man and the river. The giver and taker of lives! Good luck, Darren!
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Darren White
Date: 11/26/2016 12:42:00 AM
Thank you, Tamal :)
Date: 11/23/2016 6:17:00 AM
I especially love that first line Darren:-Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Darren White
Date: 11/23/2016 6:27:00 AM
Thanks Jan :)
Date: 11/18/2016 1:58:00 PM
- The river gives and takes ... a great poem, Darren :) - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a peaceful and lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Darren White
Date: 11/18/2016 2:01:00 PM
Wishing you the same, Anne-Lise, and thank you :)
Date: 11/18/2016 11:45:00 AM
impressive in imagery and sensitive thoughts, darren...you flow with this one!..huggs
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Darren White
Date: 11/18/2016 12:46:00 PM
Thank you, Nette :) Hugs!
Date: 11/17/2016 5:32:00 PM
I love this poem, such beautiful craft you have penned here! :)! Have a wonderful rest of your day! <3 Juli-Michelle.
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Darren White
Date: 11/17/2016 11:39:00 PM
Thank you, Juli-Michelle :) <3
Date: 11/17/2016 9:37:00 AM
The road less traveled and willfulness is full of surprises, nicely woven Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 11/17/2016 9:39:00 AM
Thank you, Paloma :)

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