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The river started high in the mountain from melting snow and rain, It flowed downhill for hundreds of miles over stones and around rocks; Merging with streams, it became wild, meandering past green forests, Fast flowing pristine water, foaming white water rapids, so dangerous. Past rugged terrain and woods lovely, dark and fathomless, With shorelines of foliage and fallen trees decaying; And in lagoons green and mossy, the river rested; waiting, Then surged forth, under bridges, past homes to the ocean. ______________________ September 6, 2015 Verse Written By Broken Wings Concept - River For the contest, Poem That Did Not Place And More, sponsor, Nette Onclaud Sixth Place

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Date: 9/19/2015 8:48:00 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
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Date: 9/14/2015 6:20:00 PM
BIG congrats, I'm not sure what placement you got. Will have to go see later. Too much catching up to do right now. I am ONLINE> YAYYY but I still have no time for the soupmails. Hope you had a great day!
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Date: 9/14/2015 4:52:00 PM
Wonderful imagery in your river poem, Broken. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/14/2015 1:31:00 PM
Broken, congrats on placing in Nette's awesome contest. SKAT
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Date: 9/14/2015 4:53:00 AM
flowing with such ease and beauty, constance... the foamy image lends itself to the theme on touch, and i wanted more of this sort all through the piece... thank you for joining my contest and sweet congrats!
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Date: 9/14/2015 4:02:00 AM
Congrats on ur superb winning write broken! u hv an awesome way with words!
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Date: 9/7/2015 9:04:00 PM
Very nicely done!! I have one starting at top of mountain and going to the ocean, but it's much too long! Gosh I gotta get BUSY.
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Date: 9/7/2015 10:20:00 AM
BW, this is a well written piece. It had a nice flow. The imagery was really good. Best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7
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Date: 9/6/2015 6:58:00 PM
Very Nice. Love all the examples of each part of the river in its motion.
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Date: 9/6/2015 4:44:00 PM
I like this poem ..it flows well the word choices are excellent and the theme is consistent throughout. The imagery is good and the reader can feel the experience. Emile.
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