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The subway steams in August heat. At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst. Alone at last two in one seat. The subway steams in August heat. Their limbs entwine and hips entreat. He strokes her hair and steals a kiss. The subway steams in August heat. At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 9/1/2013 2:47:00 PM
DG... , congratulations!! awesome "Triolet" ... xox~ LINDA
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Date: 8/29/2013 12:21:00 PM
Passionate steamy winning work..Uniquely creative..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/24/2013 5:35:00 PM
wonderful......SKAT
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Date: 8/23/2013 8:29:00 PM
nicely done....congrats on your win :)
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Date: 8/23/2013 6:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your entry and win. Love,Joyce
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Date: 8/23/2013 1:52:00 PM
Hmmmm.....I remember this scene .......hot !!! It's a little less risky when written as poetry......LOL !! (Tom Cruise........grew up...........or did he?) haha... Great poem, Deb!!
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Date: 8/23/2013 8:49:00 AM
congrats on a fine win with this steamy write
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Date: 8/23/2013 7:33:00 AM
And yet another win. Congratulations on your win
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Date: 8/9/2010 3:52:00 PM
I haven's seen this movie but I am sure you caught the essence in this great triolet. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/6/2010 11:40:00 AM
Congratulations Deb on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest "Movie Scene Triolet". This is the first time I have read a triolet or one that I actually have been made aware of should I say. I enjoyed reading yours Deb. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/5/2010 7:32:00 PM
Excellent! Your words fit this style really well. A well deserve win. congrats, Steve
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Date: 8/5/2010 4:02:00 PM
When I saw this movie during this scene you could have heard a pin drop...the sexual tension in the room was overwhelming...and yet we "saw" nothing.... a marvel of acting, directing & filming & goodness the sound track!
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Date: 8/5/2010 2:57:00 PM
Deb, A BIG CONGRATS. truly my favorite triolet. STEAMY!!!!
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Date: 8/5/2010 8:28:00 AM
Loved this movie then......and still do!!! (And must say, he stole more than a kiss on that speeding subway!!) and.............his mother's glass egg was the least of his problems!! Great pick.....Hip Hooray for you!!! Fun one to remember! :)
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Date: 8/5/2010 8:05:00 AM
great scene! and congrats on your first place win with this cool poem :D
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Date: 8/5/2010 8:03:00 AM
Congrats TEACH on your big first place win for this superb write from a great movie... enjoy your top spot for your top notch write.. perfection.. with luv.. pupil...
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Date: 7/30/2010 4:23:00 AM
Enjoyed your triolet very much, very visual... and now the subway steams for a different reason ;) ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 7/27/2010 6:56:00 AM
enjoyed reading your works today! Great write!
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Date: 7/26/2010 7:46:00 PM
You painted a wonderful romantic scene with words ~ well done ~
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Date: 7/26/2010 7:37:00 PM
A wonderful pen picture of the moments, Debi. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 7/26/2010 6:33:00 PM
gorgeous art! Deb! jimbo
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