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Rising Above My Pinnacle

Rising I climb towards the pinnacle of my mind Slipping on my inconsistancies Grabbing at the edges of my understandings Afraid to look down For fear I will fall into my abyss My feet hold fast Pushing me upwards Extending my reach to the next crevice My brain’s intricate folds Jagged memories This words I hold onto They slow my ascent My not good enoughs My cannots My I've always been this way Here I am hanging upside down Telling myself I'm tired I can't hold on It's okay to let go But wait I grasp I reach for the I can Until I pull myself to solid ground I stand upon my finite understanding Now I realize I was never alone Ropes of hope had held me in place Over the landscape of my life my eyes trace Seeing clearly my yesterday Each step that led to today All the people that helped me find my way I realize I have not come to the end of me My landscape is ever changing I flap my wings and rise above my mountain My possibilities are endless For now my mind is free In the distance Eternity Time is not insurmountable.

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Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 10/24/2014 1:38:00 PM

Rick, loved the journey through your mind and how it ends so positive. Awesome write, enjoyed immensely! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/26/2014 8:46:00 AM

A late response, sorry somehow I missed your visit. Hugs back.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 10/14/2014 9:51:00 PM

Such depth Richard and done well. Congratulations on this deserved win... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:51:00 AM

Thanks Verlena.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 10/14/2014 8:48:00 AM

Brilliant piece!! I love the line "I reach for the I can" Sometimes all we can do is reach out, and the 'I can' becomes 'I will' and then 'I did'

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:52:00 AM

So true!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/12/2014 2:30:00 PM

triumphant ride to the top, rich.. a round of cheers on your shining win

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:53:00 AM

Thanks Nette.

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/11/2014 5:50:00 PM

I love the comparisons, and how you took this theme and literally, did, turn it upside down into something more personal !! Well done, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:54:00 AM

Thanks Carrie, I wanted to do something different with the Theme.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/11/2014 4:13:00 PM

I so would love to fly more, the closest I got was a canvass by? plane & a pontoon plane? Congrad's on your win, Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:55:00 AM

I was in a helicopter once, it was amazing.

Abdul Malik

Date: 10/11/2014 10:54:00 AM

Very nice Richard. I love it. You finally found how to let go and hang onto it!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Abdul.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/11/2014 9:22:00 AM

Wonderfully written Richard. I love the meaning behind this lovely poem and what a wonderful feeling when you discover this. Congratulations on your win!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2014 8:57:00 AM

Thanks Brenda.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/11/2014 9:07:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Richard.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/11/2014 8:12:00 AM

Never to give up hope is so true Richard! What a beautiful verse my friend! Congrats on ur great win! One of your very bests!

Paul Callus

Date: 10/11/2014 7:11:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Richard! This is free verse at its best, and metaphorically speaking it's excellent. Why should we give up hope in life when we can find an abundance of help along the way! // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/9/2014 7:02:00 PM

This is a very special write Richard. Well done.

Carol Eastman

Date: 10/7/2014 9:06:00 AM

Great development... and wonderful message.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/7/2014 9:38:00 AM

Thanks Carol.

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/6/2014 9:27:00 PM

The intensity, and mature simplicity with which you build a landscape of emotions and mentality is powerfully portrayed Richard. Climbing brain mountain is arduous, standing at the summit of your soul the reward, exploring the edges, owning the decisions, you are a liberated soul in knowing struggle is a chance to excel. Awesome poem of courage, and I like how you acknowledge God so very subtly. J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/7/2014 8:01:00 AM

Thanks for this thoughtful comment. If I could favorite a comment this would surely make the list.

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 10/6/2014 7:41:00 PM

Oh Oh I feel another Winner coming on !

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/7/2014 8:03:00 AM

I hope you are right. Thanks Jerry.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/5/2014 10:21:00 PM

I just love it, flows so well, regardless of this positive message this is a story tellers poem! ( well in my view ) For me, my favorite style!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 11:24:00 PM

Thanks Arthur, you positivity is a Ways appreciated.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/5/2014 6:58:00 PM

you really made me smile richard thank you from the heart so very kind of you dear friend i changed it on a special request your words touched me bless you pal

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 11:23:00 PM

My pleasure my friend, bless you as well.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/5/2014 3:46:00 PM

love the personification here,powerful poem, one to lead by one to learn from..in fact has it all Richard..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:45:00 PM

You are kind Harry, thanks!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/5/2014 3:46:00 PM

Fabulous! !! Richard. ....a dream of a write.... Fly free.Internet problems. ... hopes this goes through. Change accent to ascent...... hugd

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:46:00 PM

Thanks Eileen, I changed it. Hugs back.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/5/2014 2:59:00 PM

powerful, inspirational, exceptional you will reach the top with this write Richard ! Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:47:00 PM

I hope so Jan, thanks and a big hug to you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/5/2014 11:47:00 AM

this is , sir , is OUTSTANDING work. I love how you extended your metaphor so marvelously. My entry was nowhere as intricate and profound as this. I expect to see this at the pinnacle of the winners' list. A FAVE

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:48:00 PM

Wow thanks Andrea, this comment makes my day!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/5/2014 10:47:00 AM

Fabulous work Richard! Endless possibilities n flapping wings to rise above mountains is the best I like! Such an inspiring write! Best wishes!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:48:00 PM

Thanks Upma. ;0)

Tim Smith

Date: 10/5/2014 10:31:00 AM

Very inspirational...Rise above the hurdles in life.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:49:00 PM

Thanks a bunch Tim.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/5/2014 10:22:00 AM

really i tip my hat richard on this one dear friend love how you painted the ending vision excellent piece

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:51:00 PM

Thanks Liam. I like your new Avatar you look distinguished.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/5/2014 9:36:00 AM

This is really powerful.I love the message,to be where I stand today with the help of others.That shows humbleness,and to rise over the mountain.Encouraging indeed.Yes you can ,and yes you will Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 6:52:00 PM

This one just came to me this morning. I'm pleased you like it.