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Ribbons and Bows Fantasy

Ribbons and bows tied to the flames rose and scorched joy with scars mundane. Two sick hearts arched in pain’s red stain. No love to come would be this same. Now, new fire crackles your sweet name. I strain for your vision in vain. Sadly, I feel our love lost aim inside the youngness of youth's game. My dreams tangle yesterday's chain in today's now for love's sweet gain. Ribbon and bow mementos maim, treasured pics and trinkets cause pain, but fantasy love has no strain. I need our love’s ash-formed refrain to stay away heart breaks strict reign. Daydreams dance for us in my brain. December 18, 2016

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Constance La France

Date: 2/11/2017 7:57:00 PM

Caycay CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem ~

Darren White

Date: 2/11/2017 4:25:00 AM

Coming back to you with love and congratulations :)

Robert Lindley

Date: 12/20/2016 10:03:00 AM

WONDERFUL PIECE AND BROUGHT BACK SO MANY MEMORIES OF MY YOUTH AND MY LOVES LOST. I hope yours was fiction and written purely from inspiration and not past experiences.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/19/2016 5:59:00 AM

Bittersweet memories in this creative piece CayCay! I hope this does really well in the contest. Have a happy holiday my friend. Blessings, Connie 7 ; )

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/18/2016 8:52:00 PM

New fire crackles your sweet name...that would scorch a heart, dear. What a write! You used unusual imagery to bring about the pain of lost love. Rose and scorched joy...for instance. Treasured pics cause pain...how sad. Good luck in the contest, dear. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/18/2016 7:01:00 PM

oh caycay, you and I went in the totally opposite direction with the challenge but I sure enjoyed how you took the line. I too would have done it the tone you used. A long lost love gone bad. YOu nailed the meaning of that line!! I put the seven since I always forget to do that too.

Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/18/2016 8:01:00 PM

Thank you, darlin'. Always good to see you! Hugs ... CayCay

Darren White

Date: 12/18/2016 9:08:00 AM

It is that you said below that it is fiction... It is totally believable. I also like the last three words: heart-soft brain. It may seem like three words, but it says so much more. That's a great expression.

Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/18/2016 11:12:00 AM

Yes, indeed - at times my heart may be brain strong or my brain turn heart soft. Brain vs heart - that's life, eh? I sure enjoyed your comments. All the best ... CayCay

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/18/2016 8:20:00 AM

Can sense your pain in these heart touching lines, CayCay:) excellent poetry:) a 7:)

Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/18/2016 8:37:00 AM

Thank you, Jo for such a great comment and for the 7. Blessings and poetry hugs ... CayCay

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/18/2016 7:38:00 AM

Hi CayCay, This is a good take on the contest theme.Good rhymes and content. I sensed a deep heartache within these lines. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/18/2016 8:37:00 AM

So glad to know the deep heartache was sensed because the write is total fiction, but who hasn't day dreamed about someone from the past? I appreciate your sweet support, Alexis. All the best ... CayCay