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People in my school have names for someone like me. Freak, crazy, weirdo, a spawn by the devil's decree. I took note of every malicious word they ever spoke, knowing that before long they'd no longer make me a joke. None of them knew how truthful were their mocking words. They had no clue I could spread my wings to fly among the birds, with ravens that caw out for blood at the stroke of each midnight. I'd fill their haunting dreams with images of daunting fright. A snip of dried herbs, a pinch of fungal root, boiled in fat of fowl, a concoction for me to savor, secreted to me by my mother, an owl. Eyes that see through bloodshot color, they would see them too when the full moon was high and the sky turned dark cobalt blue. No help will they receive from a scream or gyrations to be free. They soon will know they should never have made a mockery of me. The time is near, my brew is cooled, now it's my time to have fun. Tonight their dreams will be nightmares, a gift from the evil one. With their eyes closed, they will envision they are being chased by hundreds of bloodshot eyes, the likes of which they've never faced. Black robes adorned, scepter of wormwood waved from my hand. Eyes... wild bloodshot eyes, will seek vengeance at my command. Fog advances to the bedrooms of those who sleep in peace. My adrenaline is pumping, just a few more minutes until release. A snarl of satisfaction I feel curled upon my blood red lips. You won't belittle me again with your taunting nocuous quips. NOW! I gave the order for the eyes to creep into their dreams But my heart is beating too fast. This was not part of my schemes. I can't see a bloody thing. What's happened to the spell I cast? How long will this blindness torture me? How long must it last? A truant officer was sent to see what had become of the freak. Through a window he saw many ravens, all with bloodied beak. No body was discovered. All that remained was a robe of black and a note scratched upon the floor. "Too late to take it back." :::::::::::::::::::::::::: December 26th, 2015 Deep and Dark Contest Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 1/15/2016 10:06:00 PM
LIN LANE, congratulations on your win!!! XOX ~LINDA~
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Date: 1/13/2016 1:01:00 AM
My goodness! Very well-written, organized, presented, excellently rhymed, deep and dark poem. Congratulations. A 7
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Date: 1/13/2016 3:33:00 AM
Thank you very much, Susan.
Date: 1/9/2016 3:11:00 AM
Greetings Lin. Congrats for your placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 1/9/2016 3:22:00 AM
Hi, Teddy. Thank you.
Date: 1/8/2016 7:22:00 PM
Lin, Congratulations on your Deep and Dark win. **SKAT**
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Date: 1/8/2016 9:47:00 AM
Definitely deep and dark. Wonderful, flowing couplets. Reads to me like Prose Poetry, telling a great story. Really enjoyed it, Lin.
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Date: 1/8/2016 10:01:00 AM
Thank you, James. I really appreciate your compliments. ;)
Date: 1/8/2016 7:57:00 AM
Excellent! This poem builds a fascinating, bone-chilling story, maintains an appealing rhyme scheme, AND conveys a strong theme. Congratulations! Janice
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Date: 1/8/2016 8:25:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Janice, for so many great comments. They are appreciated.
Date: 1/7/2016 9:18:00 PM
Lin congratulations on your win!
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Date: 1/8/2016 3:21:00 AM
Thank you so much, Michael...nice avatar.
Date: 1/7/2016 9:11:00 PM
Wow!! Congratulations on your win!!!!!
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Date: 1/8/2016 3:21:00 AM
Thank you very much, Eve. I felt a little evil writing this.
Date: 1/7/2016 8:06:00 PM
Wow...very dark and so well-written Lin. Congratulations on your wonderful win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/8/2016 3:20:00 AM
I think I was scaring myself. lol Thanks, Sandra.
Date: 1/7/2016 6:00:00 PM
Congratulations Lin
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Date: 1/7/2016 7:21:00 PM
Thank you so much, WS.
Date: 1/7/2016 4:51:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/7/2016 7:20:00 PM
Thanks, Jan, and congrats to you on yours. ;) hugs
Date: 12/26/2015 4:31:00 PM
WOW I am blown away by the vivid description and imagery in your tale - talk about deep and dark Lin this is awesome! good luck in the contest will make this a fave so I can dip into it again:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2015 5:36:00 PM
I'm going to sleep with the light on lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/26/2015 5:35:00 PM
Did it scare ? lol Jan, thank you for liking it enough to save...hugs.

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