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Rejection

i remember all of it that afternoon we cut hearts and stars from foil we placed the silver ones in the sky we placed the beating ones on our lips i know because i felt you like my own breath that is why I thought you were oxygen that was the times when matches were lit that was when my thermometer cracked i remember it all of that afternoon you were tearing leaves in the kitchen you with fingers long and slender you with french vanilla ice cream nails i know because in my mind i was licking you before you ejected a river of tributaries before we bubbled on to the element before we merged over an empty pot i remember that afternoon all of it the priceless german kitchen knife the bone cutting diamond hard blade the slashing beef tongue spiced in cayenne i know because like helium i floated away through the blood red tomato coloured air through the dripping wet haze of rejection through the liquid salt of hand made wounds i remember of it all that afternoon served on a yellow plate of grapes sour served in the fantasy of yesterday served in the kindlings of one afternoon

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 9/12/2014 9:17:00 PM
Congrats on ur awesome winning write Maurice! Unique take on theme!
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Date: 9/12/2014 12:01:00 PM
Hi Maurice, congratulations on your great win! Excellent write! Well-deserved! Pandita
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Date: 9/12/2014 10:40:00 AM
Hi Maurice, stopping by this one again... Nope, it is not here, Congratulations, with your awesome rejection poem.... LOVE LINDA
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:49:00 AM
Wonderful on the theme of rejection, Maurice. congrats
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Date: 9/12/2014 6:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this well thought out poem Maurice. Fantastic descriptions.
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Date: 9/11/2014 10:58:00 PM
Congratulations and thank you for entering. Love it and you, Love and prayers and God bless you, Gina
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Date: 9/10/2014 9:32:00 AM
The use ofmetaphors are simply BRILLIANT!! Magnificant writing, Maurice
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/10/2014 1:56:00 PM
thank you so much for your kind words.
Date: 9/10/2014 7:48:00 AM
wow what interesting descriptions, you are a man of many talents and creativity is one of them.
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/10/2014 1:56:00 PM
thanks Cas you cutie you.
Date: 9/9/2014 7:21:00 PM
Love all the imagery and the metaphor...I used to play on a softball team called "sour grapes" we used to soak grapes in vodka and eat them between innings...cheers
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/9/2014 10:57:00 PM
the grapes sound great. thanks Tim.
Date: 9/9/2014 6:25:00 PM
Maurice, this is so sweet, amazing imagery, even though it is tough and it burns. Rejection, cuts like a diamond. OUCH! So much for that one kindling afternoon... Awesome poem t a g... LOl.. your it.. I'm so behind.. : nanana-na Batman... LOL PD in the house
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/9/2014 6:46:00 PM
Holey catfish batman tag your it.
Date: 9/9/2014 3:59:00 PM
My goodness. What imagery!! I was not quite sure how to take this one at first, but it is very obvious the main character got terribly hurt by the end of it! I adore food and I just love the way you inserted the images of food to enhance your emotions!
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/9/2014 4:14:00 PM
Andrea thank you.

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