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Reflection

while hills taunt us with scrubby tufts of green the long fingers of the sun stroke the horizon a jet splits the sky with a cloudy tail rattling the window's glass and my reflection ________________________________________________________ Contest: "Through My Window" sponsored by Nette Onclaud By Carrie Richards 1/2114

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/31/2014 3:23:00 AM
Very beautiful . Our friend Ralph acted as my guide to you . Delighted he did , He has very good taste .
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Date: 1/29/2014 10:45:00 PM
Bummer about that syllable count. I still ADORE this. I wonder if kimo even needs to be concerned in syllables. Haiku are from Asia and modern ones do not stick to syllables!!
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Date: 1/29/2014 7:59:00 AM
Fantastic! That "jet" being, perhaps, your heart in flight...making you see what you may or may not be ready for. Another damn fine job!
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Date: 1/28/2014 6:19:00 PM
Exquisite first verse, then the jolting present-day reality of the second...What a contrast you have created here my friend! - Tim
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Date: 1/28/2014 4:00:00 PM
Beautifully defined , the land and the sky. My compliments, Carrie
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Date: 1/28/2014 3:59:00 PM
Beautifully defined , the land and the sky. My compliments, Carrie
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Date: 1/28/2014 2:59:00 AM
Thank you Carrie for your reflections of my Satie phrasis and ekphrasis.rgds Brian
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Date: 1/26/2014 2:36:00 PM
love this clever kimo, Carrie - a sure winner
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Date: 1/25/2014 10:51:00 AM
Carrie stunning limo and what an image..just great...David
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Date: 1/25/2014 6:47:00 AM
I love it, Carrie. I can just see you standing at a big picture window where the landscape is wide-open, tranquil, peaceful...that takes one to that inner soul to think and ponder...to reflect. And the pondering ends when you notice your own reflection and find peace within yourself. Nice. Look what it made me think! Good write.
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Date: 1/24/2014 3:30:00 PM
What a great poem. Its nice reading your piece once again. Keep on writing please.
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Date: 1/21/2014 7:22:00 PM
Nette should just love this one, Carrie. I sure do!! I especially like the last one. Such a cool ending on it.
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