Recluse

heart of compassion, stifled by rejection conceiled with conscientious imperfections marvel mind mortified by manmade mistakes confined in constraint, no mental escape flunking society's supposed expectancy, failing oneself, free-falling inwardly sparkles in eyes subsided, light subdued flame flickers restrainted by winded worries' mood forboding face, faded flat with fatigue harness of helplessness, harrowing grief sandbag shoulders, sullen with unbounded burden unknown, none come close, to help the hurting 9/9/2023

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Gary Radice

Date: 9/11/2023 4:06:00 AM

Great use of alliteration adds to this poignant poem and helps to highlight the pressures and expectations that society puts on people. I like the way, in particular, you describe how the reclusive person presents.. "sandbag shoulders". Many people shun the sick and sad due to a lack of knowledge, time and just not wanting to get involved. Great work Juliet. Cheers - Gary