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Once upon a time there was a son and his mum He wanted to marry and mother agreed in a glum But asked her sunny to show her a photo Of that heart fighter from Rome or Kyoto The son brought three photos Three creature of God Three pearls from ocean, Three petals from roses. And told that one is whom he dreams Whole nights losing sleep Described his feelings so pure and deep Look here my dear, look here my maa One is too close to my heart and others so far. I wonder could you find Which of them is my sweet heart Do Mums know sons test As somewhere I heard. Mum looked at photo For several minutes And said: “she is!” The sun was so shocked – “How clever mum is?!” “How did you guess about it They all bonny and fair If ones eyes are like diamonds Second is milky white Third is waved hair”. How you could find my lover From the only attempt So easy and clear As in her brow was a stamp? Did you like her eyelids what makes me mad? Or liked her chicks as liked you dad? “NO” said a mother with disgruntled face: “When I look at this girl I am nervous”

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Date: 3/5/2013 7:31:00 PM
Saw your Facebook post and wanted to check out your art! I can't imagine writing poetry in English if it was not my first language! I loved your story and the flow of it! Very nice work. It is very hard to critique grammar in poetry because it has no set rules! I only noticed a few misused words, which could be intentional, and the last line " could be a nervous", kind of leaves the reader wondering if it was intentionally written that way. Keep up the good work! Really liked it!
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Andrea Travis
Date: 3/5/2013 7:34:00 PM
I misquoted your last line "becoming a nervous". Sorry about that! Loved your story! Very creative!

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