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Raven's Revenge

She's often seen on dark and stormy nights according to local lore, Gliding among the ancient stones standing in that fearsome moor. Mists wafting about the burial ground add to this spectral scene, And circling above, a sinister murder of ravens is usually seen! 'Tis said that this hapless wraith seems to be on an endless quest, Searching, ever searching as if for her own eternal rest. Or does Raven seek a specific grave upon which to wreak revenge, Whose occupant for some wrong she is determined to avenge? She kneels at each stone and peers at the name etched thereon, Is heard softly sobbing, then slowly rising, she moves on. As she makes her ghostly bourne, heard is her plaintive moan, As with vengeful eyes she examines each lichen-covered stone. Is it a lover she searches for who left her bereft and forlorn, Who broke her heart and filled her soul with eternal scorn? Or could it be with malice in her heart she seeks reprise, For the brutal murder that caused her untimely demise. The thunder roars and lightning flashes as she glides to and fro. The troubles that distress this restless soul we shall never know. This fabled phantom presses on wearily, wearily lurching, Determined to complete her quest, searching, ever searching! Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired © All Rights Reserved Placed No. 6 in Constance's "Among The Dead" Contest - February 2011

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Date: 2/24/2011 11:49:00 AM
I had only read a couple of the poems and wanted so badly to enter but...too many things were going on and didn't get to. I knew Constance would have a time selecting her winners. There is a long list of winners here. You should be so proud of your winning poem congratulations Bob. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/19/2011 7:11:00 AM
Many congratulations Robert on your fine win in Constance's wonderful contest....:)
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Date: 2/18/2011 6:47:00 PM
Wonderful story here!Congrats Robert on your win!
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Date: 2/18/2011 6:21:00 AM
I love the air of mystery that leaves the reader wondering why "this fabled phantom" visits the graveyard each night. Don't know how I missed this one earlier, Bob, but am so glad to see it in the winners' circle. Great work, my friend! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:35:00 AM
you go bob, the " bright fame..".. KUDOS to you for the win! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/18/2011 12:23:00 AM
Sensational story, Robert. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie
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Date: 2/17/2011 6:25:00 PM
I predicted earlier this entry would win in Constance's contest. Bob, you did it again. Congratulations!
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Date: 2/17/2011 6:24:00 PM
Wonderful retelling of the story. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/17/2011 6:05:00 PM
Bob, great job and congratulations on your honored sixth place win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/17/2011 6:03:00 PM
Congratulations Bob! Always glad to read your verse! RAY
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:32:00 PM
Congratulations on the sixth place win in the contest of Constance, Bob
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your very fine win in the "Among the Dead" Contest, Bob! Well deserving. Always, Annalise
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Date: 2/17/2011 4:47:00 PM
Congrats Bob on your wonderful winning poem in Among the Dead with this exceptional entry my friend.. enjoy another grand victory with luv..
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Date: 1/29/2011 4:31:00 AM
Great one Robert...You have the flow, rhythm, and rhyme down very well..Interesting story you have told that matches the picture so well...Good luck with this sure winner..Thanks for stopping by and commenting..Sara
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Date: 1/28/2011 10:32:00 AM
Fine poem with great descriptiveness and rhyming. This has to be one of the better entries for the contest.
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Date: 1/28/2011 7:30:00 AM
Excellent entry, Chief. Enjoyed. Best of luck. My shovel is sure getting a workout, as a matter of fact so am I. Got some more coming over the weekend. I am being careful and pacing myself. Can't wait till it's time to get my mower out. Best to you and Vera. Una/Ralph
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Date: 1/27/2011 7:57:00 PM
Very nice poem...Good luck in the contest...Jimmy
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Date: 1/27/2011 2:54:00 PM
Well! Robert, to be compared to Poe is a good thing - one of my very favorite poets of all time. A poem I wrote that is posted on this site has been compared to him as well 'Cannon Lee'. I suppose his spirit comes to visit all us poets from time-to-time. Lainie
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Date: 1/27/2011 4:30:00 AM
Sensational! Robert. Lainie
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Date: 1/26/2011 4:50:00 PM
An awesome write Bob ... great tale of Raven's revenge and search to find the one she is seeking ... wonderful rhyme as always my friend.. and good luck with this rare beauty entry ..luv..
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Date: 1/26/2011 4:45:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest.
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Date: 1/26/2011 4:33:00 PM
Great entry. Very eerie. Good luck in the contest. Joyce
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Date: 1/26/2011 3:44:00 PM
Very very logical interpretation of the picture with suspense, Bob. Good luck.
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Date: 1/26/2011 3:44:00 PM
Robert, I really like how you made yours into a mysterious ghost story about the woman. In my story she is on the brink of becoming a ghost. haha. Very interesting to read, and I hope you do well in the contest. LUv, Andrea
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