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It is estimated up to 4000 date rapes occur in Australia per year- that is disgusting and makes most men angry.  It was raining and cold outside when I wrote this. Sad.

Red lights in her eyes were slow, full of laze, Her feet conversed with the black, As she stepped a vague step into a daze, Her feet were under attack, Then she fell to the ground like a petal on dew, She lay like a rose in a lake, Still dancing with a colourful blur of a shade, Like she did when she was awake, And her blur faded slowly to a comfortable grey, Her mind faded to a tranquil serene, Where she drifted along like two lovers in rain, Two lovers you find in a dream, And she never found out who stole who she was, When she was unable to think, She never found out who planted the seed, Who spiked her evening drink.

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Date: 9/9/2020 7:23:00 PM
Amazing poem about a sad subject for men and women and children because it happens to so many victims. :( kelli
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 9/9/2020 8:47:00 PM
thankyou for visiting Kelli, its a tough topic
Date: 3/8/2020 6:08:00 PM
i'm not always a fan of quatrain rhyme but this is a good poem, the last stanza being particularly strong - i especially like the line "she never found out who stole who she was"..thank you for your comment on my poem
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Date: 3/5/2020 10:15:00 PM
Truly one of your best writes. x
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 3/6/2020 5:03:00 AM
Thankyou mo, im glad u liked this poem. Like jan said below, charlottes poem is rape 100%. Thanku again.
Date: 3/4/2020 7:24:00 PM
Date rape is an increasing problem in many places, thanks for highlighting this crime so poetically Lewis. One of the most moving poems I have read on soup is Rape by Charlotte Puddifoot. hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2020 7:39:00 PM
Charlotte's poem is one of the most powerful poems I have read on soup - for so many reasons I wish it could be studied in schools. hugs Jan xx
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 3/4/2020 7:31:00 PM
wow, her poem was so confronting, and real and disturbing and helpless , thanks Jan.

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