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This city has seen dry days, the injustice of rainless-ness with strengthening rays. June’s just begun to threaten with waves packed in pavement pounded by feet hidden in cracks of sidewalk laid back in haze and in heat until today’s forecast spotted my face umbrellas marched by I stayed in the rain. I’d forgotten the sound of a city when wet and no matter how fast, cars getting hit. Rain falls equally on all. And when it stops, we smell the sewer— the urban drains’ petrichor. June 5, 2016 Rain Contest

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Date: 7/6/2016 8:45:00 AM
Congrats Rita, for your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-)
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Date: 7/6/2016 5:15:00 AM
Rain in the city can be smelly... Congratulations on your win, Rita:)
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Date: 7/5/2016 2:46:00 PM
Nicely done, Rita !! I especially loved the way you walked us through a summer rain in the city! Congrats to you!
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Date: 7/5/2016 12:49:00 PM
Big congrats to you Rita! This was a poem that took on rain and petrichor in a very different way and I really enjoyed this. The city scene & feel that you've painted here really stood out for me, and what also struck me here was your 3rd to the last line. So true! Plus the sewer line and relating it to petrichor was really neat. Thank you for entering my contest :)!
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 7/5/2016 1:03:00 PM
Thank YOU! My pleasure!
Date: 6/6/2016 6:16:00 AM
I love the contrasts you have invoked here, Rita. Great write! Cheers, David
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 6/6/2016 6:17:00 AM
Thank you, David!
Date: 6/5/2016 8:46:00 PM
Very different...I enjoyed the read. Havent tackled this one yet. Barbara
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Rita A. Simmonds
Date: 6/5/2016 11:09:00 PM
Thank you, Barbara!

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